Arashi (Japan Fundraiser Fic #3): Where the Heart Is 2/4

May 11, 2012 00:47

Hello again, here's part two!

Title: Where the Heart Is
Words: ~9,200 this part
Rating: NC-17
Warnings, description, etc: see previous entry

Man, this chapter had a lot of issues but thank gooooodness I had the expert and elegant advice of lysanderpuck and toinkydoink to straighten that mess out. Thank you guys!!!

PS. this is also available at AO3 if you prefer ( Read more... )

fundraiser fic, ot5, arashi, chaptered, nc-17

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mellastella May 11 2012, 07:19:51 UTC
I feel like crying in sadness with the marriage dilemma but also in joy because - even though it was a given fro the start - the boys are finally giving into Aibaby's wishes. In all honesty, your writing make me have so many feelings. ♥ I can't wait to see where you'll take this next.

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primroseshows May 12 2012, 23:52:39 UTC
Yeah, this was heavier stuff than I'd originally wanted to write for the fic -- but IDK it just came out?? It's my first time dealing with OT5 and I couldn't manage to ignore the fact that there are all these things working against having a relationship like that... I felt it was probably important to deal with it straight up, so there's not some suspension of belief going on in the background. ANYWAY. Thanks for your comment!! The next chapter will have more happy parts, I swear!

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lianne29 May 11 2012, 08:39:44 UTC
I have so many feelings for this chapter.

The talk about meeting filial responsibilities and Sho's dreams about having children was heartbreaking.

Nino and Ohno staying over and knowing just how to calm Aiba and then Aiba knowing just how to deal with Sho and Jun (Aiba did a craft project and made wings) had me smiling.

I agree with how you perceive Nino. He's flexible yet easy to snap. What scared him is not the thought of living together but what the effects of seeing each other 24/7 will do to their relationship. The whole confrontation with Jun was a very powerful scene.

So that was how they ended up all together. Aiba has always been the person who lays out their goals while the others would both unconsciously and consciously work to reach it. Aiba is one special person.

"All these news articles do," Sho says, shaking together the sheets of his paper with a sombre finality, "is show us that we're never really free from the expectations of the audience."THIS. Everyone has expectations put upon them by others but it is a ( ... )

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primroseshows May 12 2012, 23:56:10 UTC
Your analysis is spot on! Or maybe... my analysis (in the fic) is spot on and we share many of the same opinions! EITHER WAY I THINK IT'S GREAT.

Aiba has always been the person who lays out their goals while the others would both unconsciously and consciously work to reach it.

This is TRUTH, hardcore. I've always had a personal headcanon where Aiba's ideas start out as being shot down by everyone, but in the end they wind up at the exact situation he'd anticipated, even it's totally by accident. He's just that kind of genius to me, haha.

Thank you for reading and commenting!! ♥

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faiee May 11 2012, 14:43:29 UTC
this was beautiful. it touches on so many real insecurities in everyday relationships about things people are scared of... and it's touched a chord in my heart.

i'm so glad it's getting happier soon <3

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primroseshows May 12 2012, 23:57:07 UTC
Aww, thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! And yeah, it will be a happier chapter next -- although knowing me, there's gonna be some sort of conflict thrown in, hahaha x___x

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anoudegozaruna May 11 2012, 16:13:30 UTC
It's unfair for you to post this in the middle of the night. I was gonna be good, get to sleep early and actually be awake for lectures, but nooooooo, you had to post fic. I have no self-control!

I think the thing I love most about this is how you don't ignore the potential difficulties of their relationship. Most fics of this kind will paint me happy, perfect rainbows, but you give me touches of harsh reality. It makes the story so much more real and personal to me. And Sho always and forever wanting children...so many feelings!

Can't wait for the next installment!

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primroseshows May 13 2012, 00:01:20 UTC
I'm pretty bad at this. I noticed the same pattern, that I would always post at like 2am in the morning right before I'd collapse in bed. It's because I always edit after I come home from school and whatnot and it ALWAYS takes me longer than I anticipate but I'm too impatient to go "whatever, I'll post tomorrow" so I work until I'm finished, then POST. Then it's like shit o'clock in the morning. SORRY BB :( I'm gonna post at a "better" time for chapter 3, okay!

I ACTUALLY TRIED TO IGNORE THEM because I was afraid they'd bring the fic down too much but I FOUND I COULDN'T because otherwise I was at a loss of what to right. I can't have a full on fluff fic because I am just not capable of writing that, apparently, and it was always nagging me, like, "omg what about Sho and kids, omg what if their relationship gets outed," so I have to deal with my own insecurities about an OT5 relationship with the story. /o/

Thank you so so much!! ♥ You're one of the best people ever.

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waxrose May 12 2012, 03:44:41 UTC
Ahhh, this story is EVERYTHING. ♥ And by that, I mean that it is completely satisfying not only in events, but explanations. You spend so much time in Aiba's head, in recall, and working out the details. The whole narrative is just amazing. I love the plausibility of all this, and I still want more. *__*

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primroseshows May 13 2012, 00:03:35 UTC
"NARRATIVE" is a very good word!! I was trying to find a way to classify the type of story this was, because I felt "Aiba POV" was kind of falling short, even though it's correct. But "Aiba's narrative" sounds much better to me! /cool story bro

Thank youuuuu thaaaaank you thaaaaank yooouuuuuu~~ KISSES

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