Go Big, Go Home (#3 of probably 7?)

[princess_george]

Title: Go Big, Go Home (#3 of probably 7?)
Rating: The series is R, this instalment is PG-13 at most (mild language).
Length: Almost 9000 words (this instalment)
Timeline/Spoilers: Takes off from somewhere between "Pawnee Rangers" and "Meet and Greet" - AU from there. Basically another way of thinking through the questions posed by Season 4.

Comments

[sullen_aquarian]

I love Dottie and Louise, kind of makes me want a Parks flashforward to when everyone is old (and Tom is still hitting on women).

Also really liked Chris in this chapter. And I feel that I really need to organize my apartment.

[princess_george]

Thanks, I'm so pleased the ladies worked for you. Chris was tricky, too, to get so I was OK with his reactions. Glad you liked it!

I should organize my place too. Instead I wrote this...

[throwingpens]

Dottie and Louise! An older version of Leslie and Ann, I love it. Poor confused Leslie.

This definitely felt like less than the listed word count--which is a good thing. Can't wait for the next part. (In the meantime, I'll pull a Leslie and finish cleaning my apartment...)

[princess_george]

That's great! I think this was the longest chapter. Maybe I should break them up more?

The next part is coming pretty soon. Good luck with the cleaning in the meantime.

Thanks for reading!

[princess_george]

Thanks a bunch!

[stillscape]

Yay, you posted! I think the revised scene works really well. The small details are really shining, too, I think. Ben's tangent about lamps. Leslie eating the jelly beans. Donna's upscale sandwich. Hee.

[princess_george]

Thanks, glad the scene worked better! And you know that Donna's sandwich is all from our exchange, right? I'd forgotten about her sophisticated palate until you reminded me... I was wondering if chipotle might be too intense for her, though...

[stillscape]

Oh, I remember. "Donna's sandwich" is on the list of oddly specific details I have had very serious conversations about, along with things like "what Ann would wear to prom" and "April's favorite Christmas carol." The foccacia was a nice touch.

[princess_george]

So, clearly, the next questions are:

a) What would Ann wear to prom?

and

b) What is April's favorite Christmas carol?

I don't think a BLT on foccacia with chipotle mayo is in fact Donna's favourite sandwich. I'll have to think about what might be, but I don't think that's it. I was definitely trying to set the tenor of "it's not my favorite but it will have to do since it's the best this lame cafeteria has to offer" in the scene. I hope that came across in the tone of the writing.

I think asiago cheese is involved in Donna's favourite sandwich, either in the bread or as a sandwich filling. And maybe a touch of arugula?

[craponaspatula]

Senior citizens + Donna + Leslie cleaning up because of Ben = YAY

[princess_george]

Yay!