I think I see the connection between the first half and the second half, now. When I first read it, the shift in voice was confusing, though. Maybe there's a way to make it more clear that you're moving from one narrative voice to another? Some sort of break, or perhaps the mirror's pov in italic?
Have you written any other scenes with this character? I'm curious about what she's done to fill the lives of her children with turmoil. You've put forward enough that I'd like to know more about her.
They're actually two separate pieces, but given the submission form, it made it seem like we were supposed to give one link for them both as opposed to the usual two. When I posted, I noticed how it looked and wondered whether or not it could be read as one piece given they're both written from the same point of view. I think, if I wanted to, they could easily be made into a cohesive piece with, you know, a transition.
Truth be told, I watched a lot of Weeds over the summer and it was somewhat inspired by that. Basically, if you haven't seen it, she gets in all these dangerous situations with drug lords and, though she always manages to get out of them and keep her kids safe, she also ruins their lives in many ways (neither finishes school, etc.). I liked the ambiguity of her decisions because the reason she got involved in the drug business to begin with was to support her kids after their father suddenly died
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Have you written any other scenes with this character? I'm curious about what she's done to fill the lives of her children with turmoil. You've put forward enough that I'd like to know more about her.
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Truth be told, I watched a lot of Weeds over the summer and it was somewhat inspired by that. Basically, if you haven't seen it, she gets in all these dangerous situations with drug lords and, though she always manages to get out of them and keep her kids safe, she also ruins their lives in many ways (neither finishes school, etc.). I liked the ambiguity of her decisions because the reason she got involved in the drug business to begin with was to support her kids after their father suddenly died ( ... )
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