letter of complaint

[psycheeward]

This is for scott, it's a letter to the management of our building, but if anyone else has any editing options, or is aware of something about our building and has suggestins in that way, then go ahead and respond

Comments

[jeremyblue]

I think it's good and brings up a lot of valid points and concerns. could I edit it before you send it p-l-e-a-s-e? nit noo.

[shoff]

I don't care about grammar that much. Sly can attack that issue.

However there are some open ends and unclear parts that you Might want to address. So here goes:

"However, due to certain discoveries since the removal, I have realized that it is more than a simple inconvenience to the tenants of this building, yet I will first focus on that part. " - Not addressing this part of your argument effectively weakens your agument. You establish a momentum and then you shift it off course by citing some abmiguous example that you never clearly specify. So for one, it breaks your momentum. This quote also leaves your letter up to responses such as "I don't know whatever you think is going on but... This would allow them to respond in oppostion to your argument without ever having to deal with the issue. By leaving this point in, you leave them a way out. Either specify explicitly or leave this point out.

"This is not to say I do not trust the night staff here, because they have proven to be extremely wonderful people, but, I am

[psycheeward]

thanks. Both of them I'm not going to change much, just a few words. Because they make sense, but I just left out a few key words I guess if you read them the way you did. For example, I am not implying the night staff are not people, rather I said that because when I turn in my payment now, it is not directly to anyone, not a member of the night staff even, instead I slide it through a mail slot for it to wait any number of hours before the night staff ever enters the room.

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