comment or die

[ptmusic2586]

After a successful third movie, the name ‘X-Men’ has become a staple of popular culture, a term that shares news time with Paris Hilton and the War on Terror. It is no longer a secret, and so those of us who devoted our childhoods to the group of students and superheroes are now faced with two options: to forsake the outcasts because

Comments

[evilpnkbunnie]

very, very good read, dean! your voice shines through clearly, and it's definitely interesting. i almost wish that you talked more about your experience with being a jewish outsider, or why you feel that you can relate to magneto. but mostly, i think this was extremely well-done.

[hamalkah]

Hm... It's a great start, and I think it's definitely worth working on. But your point doesn't come across terribly clearly. Are you comparing Magneto's actions with those of contemporary Jews? If so you need to make that comparison explicit--it's risky but that makes it better worth saying. How do the X-men stand for mutants who don't have a subgroup when what seems to really bring them strength is their solidarity? (Bear in mind I only know X-men from compulsively rewatching the movies, and from your journal.) Also, beware of generalizing the reaction of "mainstream" people to the movie as "believ[ing] the X-Men were about being social outcasts, about downright rejection from the world"--it makes you sound patronizing, and I for one thought the movies were much more complex and sensitive than that.

Those mutants who, when they are confronted by a question on an official form about their race, their religion, even their sexuality, have to stop and think. It seems as though this is what you're really getting at--and if it isn't, well

[irishellie]

i agree with the aboves, it's a very intriguing essay, but i do wish there was a little more of your story and how you feel/felt like an outsider and how that's shaped you and what you want to do. you said this was for law school? did magneto's transformation from peace-maker to militant inspire you to pursue law and to help other outsiders or reform civil rights? it is very well written hun. good luck! and post the final.

[schwoik]

I also agree with what has already been said. Very good read, but kinda lost as to the point. A personal statement should attempt to divulge the person as more than just a conglomeration of childhood experiences and preferences for a particular animated series...it should be more...personal?...more "big picture"?

That's my 1.5 cents...if that makes any sense...

I hope you're having a good summer!

[lcls617]

hey babe

i like it very much, i think it comes full circle and progresses well, and has a good use of analogy, and you like the small world well with the big world (i forget the word for that...) but i think you have an excellent point at the end with "constant reinvention that tells the story of all mutants"...i think you should develop that more. but i loves it!