Poetry Challenge

[puddingdale]

You guys are so very creative. Fact.
I would love to experience more of that instead of flooding you with my half-hearted compositions.
Therefore, I come up with this challenge *drumroll*
I will present you with the first stanza of a poem that some of you will probably know - but don't cheat! It is absolutely illegal to even glance at the original

Comments

[elle_icit]

*LOL* Hope Leonard is ok with the new title. I'm calling it......Promised Land. :-)) Erm...... the words coming to mind for the second stanza are a bit too sexual....I'll take some time and tone them down shall I?

[puddingdale]

Aaaah, obviously more inventive than Leonard so far. ;) Take your time with the second stanza but remember: Lennie has no problem with explicit wording and I can put up a warning for minors ;)

[elle_icit]

toned down version.....

He thought he might own them
with his whispers and his smiles
till sinking deep inside he lost himself
and in their embrace he cried.
Yeeeah....

[puddingdale]

Thank you very much! This is brilliant - interesting turn-out and totally different from the original. I like the way the seducer goes all weak in the end.
I am sure Lennie would like it as much as I do :)

What about the naughty version by the way? Hehe. ;)

Now we need more participants, so that we can see what they might come up with. I find that highly interesting. Maybe I should advertise somewhere *lol*