Anyway...so we had to write this stupid shit about our hero! for english...and i can't pick one...but i wrote this one...tell me what you guys think
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Okay. My chritisisms, spelled wrong for comic releif. You don't have to use any of this seriously, but since you were asking: I think that the meaning of the poem is nice but I think that you need to make a choice between rhyming and not ryhming, because i think that the way that you are trying to rhyme it is ruining the overall feel of the poem. Not everything fits, so maybe you should try a different beat or perhaps rearrange some things if you still feel like rhyminh? The thing is, I'm getting lost in your poem because I'm trying to figure out what way you are rhyming your poem- or maybe what beat you are moving at, because I feel like it keeps changing throughout your poem.
Then again, I might just need to hear you say it for me.
Couldn't have said it better myself. I stumbled upon this 60 years after it was written and it was still a pleasant read with those details aside. To be honest, I'd really like to see this develope. Oh and Marissa, you're my hero.
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Then again, I might just need to hear you say it for me.
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