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Behind Closed Doors

Mar 12, 2011 22:40

Title: Behind Closed Doors
Author: purplesephone
Length: One-Shot
Pairing: JaeMin
Genre: Jae/Min (or rather Min/Jae)
Rating: NC-17 (Go hard or Go home!....yeah, bad choice of words...)

Starring: Jerk!/Arrogant!/Unaware!Jaejoong and Shy!/Nervous!/Desperate!/Possessive!Changmin

Summary: He stared down at him wide-eyed. The water’s spray was hitting him now too, and ( Read more... )

Comments 7

whatifgirl86 March 13 2011, 04:16:31 UTC

Aww this is only a one-shot:( It was really good. I like how you wrote both of the characters. I wonder if Jaejoong is really that clueless:D

Great! jaceni March 13 2011, 05:22:27 UTC

If you call your oneshots spamming, then I love your spamming. ^_^ Please, feel free to spam some more. XD

I love your work. How come you haven't tried a longer fics? I thought the ending was hilarious. How Changmin was having a hard time seperating fantasy and reality. Can't wait to see what else you've written. :)

Oh, here are some of the more obvious typos: "Jaejoong got up on her knees" I think you meant "his" and in the same paragraph you typed "own" twice in a row.

"he knew what she was doing," again I think you meant he. That's it. :)

haizul March 13 2011, 05:35:22 UTC

lol omg poor changmin. this was really hot though 8D

oh, and "Jaejoong got up on her knees and Changmin flopped over to his side" should be got up on his knees?

and "Changmin looked at him and blinked as Jaejoong smiled back at him impishly, and suddenly he realized, he knew what she was doing." should be he knew what he was doing :D

natipooh March 13 2011, 05:42:16 UTC

?????????

O_O

It just ended there???????????

I didn't understand this.

all_nostalgia March 13 2011, 16:10:07 UTC

My brain's thinking a lot of assumptions but I like this! Poor Changmin though. LOL