My first fic EVAR~!! 8D *happy dance*

[pxjloverkyoto]

OMG, I'm actually posting this~!! Please, guys, be gentle~? I appreciate any constructive comment you want to make, but please no flames. Any ideas or suggestions are welcome, and if you want to help me beta or just ask about something, IM me, k? Thank you to all and any who read this~!! <3

Title: Beast Wars: 2011 (this is subject to change, I just

Comments

[bookworm_faith]

Welcome to the world of fanfic, you can never leave~ =p Beast Wars aint really my thing (apart from your Cheetor who is adorable) but if you want proofreading, that I can do... (second line starting with "space" - I think you mean "now", also you have the same problem I do, and flip your tenses back and forth a bit. Sometimes, the fic just does that *sob* but kick the bunny a bit and see if you can't persuade it to pick one and stick with it. And then tell me how that works please so I can do it too)

[bookworm_faith]

oh duh, and I forgot to say, looks good so far!

[pxjloverkyoto]

Aaaw~! Thank you, Faith~!! X3 And explain the "tenses" thing; Im not sure I understand...O.o;

[bookworm_faith]

mm there are places where it feels like you switch from past to present tense and back a bit? Mostly during the action sequences I think, although that might just be me (*sob* I've gotten so used to stalking my own stuff for that problem...)