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Jul 25, 2007 02:39

TITLE: 11 Years Later
PAIRING: Jack/Elizabeth, Will/Elizabeth
RATING: PG-13
SUMMARY: Chapter 9, at last. More plot, as promised, more dialogue and action than my usual prose-approach; more of what there'll be next chapter, as well, as I've decided to make this an actual story, with progression, and definite point. Um. I decided that Will had to be ( Read more... )

fic, sparrabeth

Comments 22

vis_venti July 25 2007, 08:23:05 UTC

Oh....*snifs* very sad scene! Quite dipressing! But very beautiful.
Keep writing luv your story is magnificent!

pyracies July 25 2007, 21:34:07 UTC

I shall, and thank you!

salr323 July 25 2007, 09:34:26 UTC

Jack's intervention here was great; I can certainly see her frustration with domesticity, and Will's frustration with her wanderlust.

Nice portrayal of a difficult relationship. I hope she goes with Jack! :)

pyracies July 25 2007, 21:35:01 UTC

I'm glad Will's frustration came across, as I was very careful to not paint him as nothing but a guy who was being a prick. He has his reasons, I expect, they're just not reasons someone as free as Elizabeth, or Jack, can easily grasp.

Thanks for reading!

djarum99 July 25 2007, 14:24:30 UTC

Really enjoying this!

Especially loved this - removes his soaked shirt, scars and stories exactly where she'd left them - and the portrayal of the disintegration of her relationship with Will.

pyracies July 25 2007, 21:36:48 UTC

I started reading your current series yesterday, actually, but I didn't have time to finish the last chapter, so I decided to save comment until then: but, since you stopped by, I wanted to tell you I was really enjoying it so far, and will give you better feedback than that on your turf, when I stop moving. :)

thanks so much, also. glad to know people are interested in the story.

djarum99 July 25 2007, 22:32:19 UTC

Thank you! I'd love to read your comments on Sympathy.

ladyxxliz July 25 2007, 16:59:17 UTC

Very nice, love! I can't wait for the next part. I hope she doesn't change her mind about going with Jack!

pyracies July 25 2007, 21:37:55 UTC

Oh, she won't. ;p Which isn't to say that it'll be all sunshine and roses, cause I've been told I've got a big hard-on for angst.

stay tuned, and thanks!

captjackspeanut July 25 2007, 18:09:03 UTC

Oh my! Had tears in my eyes by the end. The moment Elizabeth told Jack to take her with him...they came...like a dam breaking. Beautiful writing as usual!

pyracies July 25 2007, 21:39:17 UTC

Wow, sorry to make you cry! I, I--didn't mean it!

:hands you a tissue:

It'll get better, luv, promise.