Conflict and Resolution with Bill and Fleur

[gabrielladusult]

There's no chocolate, sorry. Cross posted at my own journal. Back in January, I asked some writing group friends to give me couples to write about for Valentine's Day. I only got to two of the five requests before the actual day (still working on the others!) -- this was based on moonette1's request for Bill/Fleur angst. I altered a couple phrases and

Comments

[peverell]

Oh, wow!

:is speechless:

I specially enjoyed the clever mirroring of their situation as 'monsters'. The argument proceeded very realistically and this certainly felt like the Fleur we see in HBP. You really got right inside these characters! Wow!

Xia

[rosathome]

Le Rosbif!! Poor Bill - all that time on his hands with nothing to do but think about the possibilities and fret about the future. You managed to convey the real insecurities that both he and Fleur have about themselves while showing the real depth of their love: He only felt like himself with Fleur and both of them wanting to protect each other from the monsters they think they are.

And I loved how you had them mirror each other all the way through - even down to the little gestures like kissing each other's palms. I think these two are going to be pretty happy together if they work all their conflicts out like this. And they even manage to do it without recourse to chocolate!!

[rosathome]

I'm going to friend you btw, if that's okay.

[rosathome]

They really need to add an edit function to comments!

I also meant to say that I really liked the title - that poem is perfect for Bill and Fleur at this stage of their relationship.

[gabrielladusult]

I know -- I hate having to delete a comment when I really screw it up. I'm glad you like the title. I was going to search for a quote about beasts or monsters within when Shakespeare blessedly popped into my head.

I think half of the mirroring I wrote in there was subconscious. This is just how this couple behaves with each other in my mind. I noticed they were both saying, "What do you mean?" a lot and I thought it might be a bit much -- but just because you're in real love doesn't mean you always understand each other completely. And Bill and Fleur have a lot to learn -- as they aren't even newlyweds.

I'm so glad you liked this. I have to get on the stick and read yours!

[eudorahawkins]

Zia said this was amazing, and she was right! The twist at the end with Fleur thinking that she was a monster herself was brilliant. I'd totally forgotten about the Harpy side of Veela charm. Just brilliant!

As usual, I LOVE how you capture Fleur's voice and Bill's. I'm so glad that you posted this for the rest of us to enjoy.

[gabrielladusult]

Thank you -- I'm so glad you liked it. I've always thought that veela were just really regular women, only moreso. We are all beautiful and sexy (though sometimes not in our own eyes) and we can all be harpies -- often simultaneously.