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rachg82

The Candle in His Hand

Feb 23, 2011 01:13

Title: The Candle in His Hand
Fandom: Bones
Author: rachg82
Rating: A mild R, give or take.
Characters/Pairings: B/B
Word Count: 912
Spoilers: This baby is set post-"The Bikini in the Soup." Anything prior to that is fair game.
Disclaimer: Bla bla I don't own this show bla bla I don't own these characters bla bla I FIND ( Read more... )

tv is my bff, i have too much time on my hands, music makes me happy, bones, hey look i wrote fic

Comments 53

c_canadensis February 23 2011, 21:55:03 UTC

This is just beautiful.

I second (or third) the people above who said the line about the ocean wanting the shore was their favourite, but this is a close second:
She is his north star,
and he has been lost his whole life.

rachg82 February 24 2011, 02:44:07 UTC

That's one of my faves too. :) I hope it's okay to have favorites in one's own writing, haha. I've found so far that things just pop out of nowhere sometimes though, and you're like, "Heyyy, where the frak did THAT come from? What fun!" So it's not even like you're appreciating your own writing, hee.

Anyway, thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked it!

c_canadensis February 24 2011, 03:20:07 UTC

Totally allowed to have faves in your own writing. :D

Bits of this reminded me vaguely of TS Eliot, and then I remembered that you're a fan because you used his poem directly in your previous fic, so his style must have rubbed off on you a little!

rachg82 February 24 2011, 04:22:31 UTC

Bits of this reminded me vaguely of TS Eliot

Ahhhhhh. That's an amazing compliment.

his style must have rubbed off on you a little!

Lots of things rub off on me, heh. I have, like, no life, and enjoy immersing myself in my obsessive interests. Poetry's in there, but so is music, television, literature, anthropology, art, and a lot of other random crap that no one else cares about. Ha. I'm a multi-purpose fangirl.

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mystizan February 24 2011, 00:49:13 UTC

One palm mapping her hip,
two rogue fingers raiding her bellybutton,
he would discover her whole.
--> LOVED this. Srsly. Imagery & metaphor & goodness.

rachg82 February 24 2011, 02:47:02 UTC

Mmm, bellybuttons. Mmm, Brennan. Mmm, Booth. It all equals goodness in my mind. Hee.

Thanks, sweetie!

mystizan February 24 2011, 03:31:06 UTC

lololololol on ur mental goodness. ur welcome!

a2zmom February 24 2011, 01:07:23 UTC

Wow, You have such a way with words. So lyrical.

Booth feels diseased & dangerous.
He's set up a quarantine
with crossed fingers behind
his back.

What an amazing insight into where Booth is right now.

rachg82 February 24 2011, 02:54:13 UTC

You have such a way with words. So lyrical

Thank you, hon'! It makes me feel really good to know I can produce something that others enjoy right now.

What an amazing insight into where Booth is

I'd say that I want to give him a hug, but that's not what he needs. He'd push it away--as if it made things worse--a symbol of what he couldn't have, what no one would actually give him--as if he were a bomb, ready to go off, destroying everything he touches. He needs (and wants) exactly what Brennan is giving him. Someone to guard the perimeter until the pain recedes. It's the only way. The hug will come in time.

ravenclawwit February 24 2011, 06:18:52 UTC

Wow. That was amazing. Ahem. Wanking has never been so beautiful. :P

I too sort of fell in love with that line about the ocean wanting the shore. I had to stop and read it a few more times before I could let it go. And also:

She understands and waits;
he will need a friend to guard the perimeter.

It describes where they are at so perfectly right now. In the last episode Brennan was so protective of him. And it costs her a little, but she does it anyways.

Beautiful work. <33

rachg82 February 24 2011, 07:03:45 UTC

Wanking has never been so beautiful

Hee! Aw, yeah. Then my work here is complete.

In the last episode Brennan was so protective of him

Bless her heart, she sure was. *squishes television*

Beautiful work

Thank you!

amilyn February 26 2011, 16:57:08 UTC

::blinks::

Oh.

OH!

There's wanking? I missed that.

But it certainly makes even more meaning here...the heartbreak to correspond...gorgeous.

rachg82 February 26 2011, 19:53:23 UTC

Ha! Yes, there's wanking, but don't feel bad, because when I first read the above comment, I was like, "wanking? As in fan-wanking? Ohhhh, she means jerking off. Yes." Too many expressions!

That's why I talked about my comment over at fourth_rose's review inspiring the PWP fic in the summary. In that comment, I replied to something she said (in italics) as follows:
---[quote]

I'm sensing a whiff of a kink here, my friends ;-)

And speaking of kinks - Brennan just totally used her porn voice on Booth when she asked, "Who am I playing?", didn't she?

YES. You know that moment got replayed on a very Special Episode of Booth's mental Masterbationpiece Theater show that night.

---[/quote]

Our rambling continued from there, both in her journal & then eventually in mine. Heh. Eventually she managed to convince me to write this fic.

The fact that he's wanking will probably clarify some of the lines for you quite a bit, hee. Like this one for instance:

One hand descends as the other slides inHis hand is movin' on down (his body) & the ( ... )

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amilyn February 26 2011, 16:52:14 UTC

This is just awesome. You are an EXCELLENT poet in the best tradition of Eliot's Prufrock, which this reminds me so of.

My favorite bits:

Calendars hung,
hopeful years
hanged,
one
after another;First...I love that you know the difference between hung and hanged...but this is a BRILLIANT use of that grammatical difference to bring contrast and connection. Fantastic ( ... )

rachg82 February 26 2011, 20:24:56 UTC

Oh my goodness, thank you for such a thorough review! You are so lovely.

You are an EXCELLENT poet in the best tradition of Eliot's Prufrock

*Can't speak. Too honored*

I love that you know the difference between hung and hanged

Hee. I was worried too few readers would know the difference/understand the significance. I'm so glad some did. Fun with grammar!

The red blinking clock as a connection to EitB

Yaaaaaaay! I didn't know if I was being too vague with this reference. I'm thrilled it was clear enough to come through.

counting of stretch marks on her thigh that is an imagined future of them with a childI was actually thinking of them more as marking her past--where she's already been. There's a lyric in one of Ani Difranco's songs ("Jukebox") that goes, "her hair bears silent witness to the passing of time/tattoos like mile markers map the distance she has come/winning some, losing some." I was thinking of that when I wrote about the stretch marks. I know people associate them with childbirth, but I have them all up ( ... )