SGA Fic: Negative To The Mark (2 / 2)

[radioshack84]

Title: Negative To The Mark
Author: radioshack84
Word Count: ~16,700
Rating: T
Set: Season 3 between The Return--Part 2 and Sunday
Summary: “What is the nature of the problem?”
“Submersion warnings, sir. I’m not sure how long we have.”
“How long we have until what?” Sheppard demanded, now wide awake.
“Until Atlantis sinks, sir.”
A/N:

Comments

[linzi5]

I really enjoyed this! I loved the fact that this was about Atlantis and John, and that pesky ATA gene. I thought the plot was really intriguing, exciting and very well executed. The pacing was excellent and it really built up in tension at the end.

I really enjoyed the whump here, thought the infirmary scenes were lovely and adored the John/Rodney banter.

Great job, thanks for sharing! :)

[radioshack84]

Thank you. It's great to hear that the plot and the story turned out well. I was having a lot of trouble all the way through getting the plot points to fit together and getting some of the transitions to sound good was rather torturous. All in all though, it was enjoyable to write. Because it was more challenging, it forced me to dig deeper in the creativity department, which was good. Thanks for reading! :)

[vecturist]

Thank you for this! I love Shep/Lantis stories and this definitely fits what I asked for. Love the snark between Shep and Rodney and the last line totally cracks me up.

[radioshack84]

Thank you, and you're very welcome. :)

I love Shep/Lantis as well, so I was excited when I got your prompt, but then I couldn't seem to get a solid idea going because I wanted to do something that wasn't just the same-old 'Shep activates something and it gives him an owie' plot!

About the last line: it stemmed from it being very late while I was writing the final scene. I was thinking, 'there's always tomorrow to finish this...' which pretty much instantly formed the ending. ;)

Anyway, I'm so glad you liked it. It was a lot of fun to write once I got going. :)

[kristen999]

This was a very original twist to the John/ATA gene interactions that was both entertaining, but backed up by thought out, logical plot details, and some really cool science. To connect excess energy issues from ZPM batteries and the city's systems was very cool, and I'm sure challenging. This was an inventive turn of a very explored subject and a satisfying read!

[radioshack84]

Thank you! This was a difficult story to write, since I had a hard time coming up with something ATA-related that hadn't been done before. For some reason I kept coming back to a scene from the movie Down Periscope (don't ask me why) and figured, hey, why not make Atlantis a submarine! The rest of the story kind of built from there. :)

As for the science-y parts, SGA has really gotten me interested in physics. I don't have much of a background in it though (which I'm attempting to change) so it's good to hear that the story came off as being plausible. Thanks for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

[giusytriso]

This is EXACLTY what I'm looking for from a Shep-Whump story!
John going on despite his injuries and exhaustion is just what I love reading. AWESOME story!

[radioshack84]

Thanks! I rather enjoy plots like that myself (if you couldn't tell). =D

[shepsgirl]

Excellent. Extremely well written and well thought out plot with wonderful Shep Whump. Pacing was perfect and I liked how John was injured from early on. Very bellievable science and a thoroughly enjoyable read. Thank you.

[radioshack84]

Thanks! I'm glad the science parts turned out well. I wasn't so sure they were going to make sense at first. Glad you enjoyed the whump. :)