Hey. So I don't see any mistakes in the game terminology at all. I liked the image of Hope setting Snow's head ablaze. I think you've got their voices down really well. It's a fun read.
I like the Jackrabbit bit a lot. I do enjoy snarky Fang.
"Go forth and conquer," eh? Thanks for taking a look. :P
I'll see if I can get one or maybe two more nods, and then call it good.
Snarky Fang is so much better than sexpot Fang. I still don't have a good mental characterization from her, but, I guess I'll hope for more fanfiction. Or - *shudder* - attempt for the third time to read Ep Zero.
I must agree with you. I do not understand people's desires to oversex these characters. This is probably the only final fantasy game without a hint of romance between the main characters. (Seven you had Tifa/Aeris/Cloud; eight there was Squall/Rinoa w/Quistis crushing on Squall; Nine was Zidane/Garnet; Ten was Yuna/Tidus. I never played 11. Twelve was Balthier and Ashe (though I don't like the pairing. But if they weren't trying to play up the sexual tension, I don't know what they were doing.) This one is a straight action/adventure game that focuses on the bonds of friendship. I'm pretty tired of everyone turning every friendship into an excuse to get busy. Besides, WHEN do these characters have time to screw on this journey? Hmm?
There is the obligatory Serah/Snow, but that's so canon that I just can't see other ships with those two happening. I think the whole game was, yeah, an attempt to see whether they could make a game with good characterization that explored platonic relationships. I think they succeeded.
*snickers* Please, don't ask that question. I'm sure there's an answer, and I don't want to know.
Heey. Sorry. This is really late. I haven't gotten a chance to just sit down and idle.
But, uh, anyway. Looks fine to me. I'd change a dialogue - specifically the "now quiet, you. It's time." But that's because I think Light's a little more formal and would probably go, "Now be quiet. It's time."
Beyond that...haha, I suck at action scenes, and you know that. So, nope, no suggestions. Nice work, by the way. :D
Ugh. Errands. Errands. Errands. Of course I'd get drafted into doing errands when I'm back.
Aww.
And...yes, I do have a problem. It's just not so obvious cause I'm always eager to keep it to a minimum, and when I have to, keep it as short as logically possibly.. but, yeah.
Might fix it there if I decide to add an A/N. But I'm lazy and don't want to spam anyone dumb die-hard enough to have me on their author alert list.
Hrm. Sounds like you should be dreaming up short practice pieces too...I suggest MGLN, so you get 3-D aerial fun, and En stops pouting at me for fics. Maybe as part of...was it "Quandary"?
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I like the Jackrabbit bit a lot. I do enjoy snarky Fang.
Go forth and post if you wish.
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I'll see if I can get one or maybe two more nods, and then call it good.
Snarky Fang is so much better than sexpot Fang. I still don't have a good mental characterization from her, but, I guess I'll hope for more fanfiction. Or - *shudder* - attempt for the third time to read Ep Zero.
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*snickers* Please, don't ask that question. I'm sure there's an answer, and I don't want to know.
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But, uh, anyway. Looks fine to me. I'd change a dialogue - specifically the "now quiet, you. It's time." But that's because I think Light's a little more formal and would probably go, "Now be quiet. It's time."
Beyond that...haha, I suck at action scenes, and you know that. So, nope, no suggestions. Nice work, by the way. :D
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Good point, I'll fix that. .........here. *grimaces at FFnet*
I can't recall you having a problem with them, at least? 8D Maybe you're just good at avoiding writing them. Thanks. :P
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Aww.
And...yes, I do have a problem. It's just not so obvious cause I'm always eager to keep it to a minimum, and when I have to, keep it as short as logically possibly.. but, yeah.
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Might fix it there if I decide to add an A/N. But I'm lazy and don't want to spam anyone dumb die-hard enough to have me on their author alert list.
Hrm. Sounds like you should be dreaming up short practice pieces too...I suggest MGLN, so you get 3-D aerial fun, and En stops pouting at me for fics. Maybe as part of...was it "Quandary"?
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