Bells Part One

[raeofthestage]

Title: Bells
Ratings: PG, for now ;)
Summary:  Nothing quiet like wedding bells.
Previous Chapters: None :))
A/N: This will be come out really randomly because I am in my last month of school...but I hope you enjoy it!

Part One

Bells. Was there a clearer more pure sound in the entire universe? Anthony didn’t think so. Bells were able to show their

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[orangefriday]

[raeofthestage]

hehehehehe i figured it was time to take another twist to this story ;)

and youre face is priceless here :P

[perfecttwo]

I demand more !!!!!!

[raeofthestage]

i wish i knew when there was going to be more....hopefully sooon...

[raeofthestage]

um..... i think that I will tell you the city i live by...but have fun finding me in the surrounding area (PS Its chicago :P)

and haven't you learned by now that I am the queen of cliffhangers?

[raeofthestage]

hahaha but i don't live in chicago proper ;) have fun figuring out what outlying county i'm in :P

[shutupandsmoon]

This is so great! I can't wait to see where this goes!

There's only one part I feel weird reading. It's the sentences: "Anthony was too nervous to pull it off. The tux could only be worn by the confident." This story is supposed to be a limited omniscient perspective, only pertaining to Anthony's view. It sounds a bit weird for him to decide definitely what other people perceive (the first sentence). I mean, we all know Anthony would look great in a tuxedo! ;-) Maybe if you said that he felt that he wasn't pulling if off instead it wouldn't sound as weird. The second sentence is very passive; perhaps if you said something like "Only the most confident could wear this tuxedo."

Still, this has a great start! I think Ian as the supportive best man is totally adorable! Keep it up!