Oh yeah, and Kalamakua totally wins UH, no doubt. The reading and the stairs was mad fun, most fun I've had reading anything, let alone my own writing.
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed that... so did I, and from the feedback we got from everyone else, it was a popular excursion. We'll try to do it again soon!
Well, if you really want an honest feedback I would first like to know how long it has to be (or can be). What kind of story is it? (love, adventure, comedy, mystery, etc.) But for starters "Together, we are Rex’s crew, and we give him reason to be proud. " I feel the theme song to the A-team come on in my head, cheesy stunts and cinematography filled with stereotypical caricatures of interesting people. If this is to be a short story, then every word is precious, as wasted words hang like worthless boulders, tinkets used to fill the page when glinting stones precisely set should be the goal. Any story told should flow like poetry to be worth its' salt.
Thanks. I was thinking about taking that one out, because it sounds trite and stupid. In answer, this is a short story, creative fiction (probably in the end about 2 pages long)and based on a sort of "Heist" scenario about a group of burglars.
Honestly, the main premise was from a dream, and while it seemed perfectly logical to put it into short story format, it's proving harder than I thought.
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So far so good. Wish I had more constuctive feedback for ya!
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In answer, this is a short story, creative fiction (probably in the end about 2 pages long)and based on a sort of "Heist" scenario about a group of burglars.
Honestly, the main premise was from a dream, and while it seemed perfectly logical to put it into short story format, it's proving harder than I thought.
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