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[raging_tofu]

This is probably the shortest amount of time I've spent on a fic. About two weeks ago this idea hit me while I was reading and within a few days, I had it typed up and had already done a few revisions. I think I may be getting over my writing slump. Many thanks go out to ashercroix, kitana_matsuri and veronicesque for providing initial feedback and helping me work out some kinks

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[ext_204452]

I really, really enjoyed this. ♥ I love seeing Sol and Ky written in an already established relationship, and this felt very sleepy and serene. :)

[raging_tofu]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

Finally catching up on recent fic posts

[rallamajoop]

I have to start by admitting I have trouble getting into almost any piece which makes a big deal about describing one of the characters' eyes - not because this is always a bad idea, but because it gets done so often in a certain kind of purple prose (especially when it comes to describing eyes as 'orbs' - which seems to have become a surprisingly popular metaphor despite the fact eyes aren't particularly orb-shaped) that a certain part of me is always going 'not this again' even before I've read far enough to tell whether it's being done well. I also have a little trouble picturing Sol being poetic enough to be comparing Ky's eyes to the ocean (unless, say, in a context where more was made of him being tired or drunk enough to be surprised by his own sentimentality).

But that aside, the image of freezing and thawing with relation to Ky does work well, and the mood, emotion and characterisation all ring quite nicely.

he’d find a way to get it and with SolI'd have put a comma or a dash between the 'it' and the 'and' here - it scans

Re: Finally catching up on recent fic posts

[raging_tofu]

I'll admit, I don't read a lot of fics, so I wasn't aware of how popular the term "orbs" is becoming, but I hardly think it's relevant since I only use it once. The context is post-sex, so I think it's completely possible that this could happen with Sol. They don't always have to be trading blows or banter, y'know?

Should have been afterwards, not afterwords.
So it should be. (Firefox is tagging it though, lol)

The weight thing at the end isn't at all about their physical weights, so you're right thinking it's a metaphor but my aim was more for referencing the weight of their relationship along with the weight of Ky's affection for Sol rather than Ky's influence over him (Sol's there-with Ky, in that position-by his own choice after all). It's a bit abstract, but this was just written on the fly as a bit of fluff. I don't see the need to be serious about it.

Re: Finally catching up on recent fic posts

[rallamajoop]

I'll admit, I don't read a lot of fics, so I wasn't aware of how popular the term "orbs" is becoming,

That's actually the main reason I felt it was something I should warn you about. It tends to be one of the most regularly listed terms whenever people start discussing what marks out purple prose for them (it comes up here and here for examples), and I've seen a number of people go so far as to say it's one of few words that will make them hit the back button after even a single use.

And I do realise this was meant to be mostly a nice litle bit of fluff, and I do think it worked well as that. The 'orbs' thing is mostly something I just thought I should point out in case it might be useful for future reference.

The weight thing at the end isn't at all about their physical weights, so you're right thinking it's a metaphor but my aim was more for referencing the weight of their relationship along with the weight of Ky's affection for Sol rather than Ky's influence over him (Sol's there-with Ky, in that position-by his own choice

Re: Finally catching up on recent fic posts

[raging_tofu]

Interesting reads, and lol at "manroot" XD I completely forgot about that one. A coworker mentioned it to me (and pulled out one of her books to prove it) when I first started working at the bookstore years ago.

[aphelion_orion]

Now I finally get around to saying something properly. Eternally late to the party. *laughs*

I liked this piece since it focuses on an aspect of Sol and Ky's relationship that I'm sad to see usually neglected in stories about them. Namely the idea that they're comfortable with each other. For all their fighting and ribbing, they have their quieter moods where they enjoy the other's company though whether or not they'll admit to that is another matter XD, and I think you've captured that well

[raging_tofu]

That's okay; party's always better after midnight (or so they say) *laughs*

I'm glad you like it, and I agree that it's something that's not often shown. Of course they won't admit anything XD

That is an easy trap to fall into and I'm more than guilty of it. I've sure you've heard "Just write whatever to get it down. Worry about the edits later" or something similar before. I tend to forget the second half (and I'd wager it's part of the reason why I sit on a story for so long.) It's something I've been working on, but also something that a proper beta would have picked up on too. (I suppose the irony of this all is that I've never read a romance novel XD) Still, I appreciate all that you had to say about this piece.

(Oh, and here's that picture I was telling you about last night.)

[raging_tofu]

Thanks, glad you liked it.