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rainbowjumpsuit

Tiva ficlet: "Poker Face"

Oct 03, 2010 09:34

Title: Poker Face
Rating: R
Summary: He wonders how much longer he can keep doing this
A/N: I had the first two lines of this in my head since yesterday afternoon. They wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote this. Hope it is acceptable.

( Poker Face )

tiva, fic

Comments 19

sharp2799 October 4 2010, 01:17:38 UTC

Wow. Smokin'! And I especially liked this:

He'd told her years ago; he's tired of pretending. She'd said that she was too, but he's never been convinced that she really understood what he was talking about.

rainbowjumpsuit October 4 2010, 02:36:11 UTC

Thank you, so much!!

sharp2799 October 7 2010, 00:58:35 UTC

Hope it was okay to rec it here:

http://community.livejournal.com/ncis_newsletter/409958.html

rainbowjumpsuit October 7 2010, 02:04:27 UTC

Yes of course!!! Thank you!

writingherhope October 4 2010, 05:53:19 UTC

This is amazing, great job really! So much packed into tiny-ness! :D Loved it!

You should post this at NCIS_Temptation, I noticed that you are a member or are watching, if you aren't a member join! You, This and any more like it are more than welcome there! :D

rainbowjumpsuit October 4 2010, 11:48:37 UTC

Wow, thank you so much.

I will try to remember to post this over at ncis_temptation today when I get off work. I'm really flattered that you think I should post it there. Thank you so much for reading/commenting.

Also, thanks for adding me as a friend! I've added you back!

saucy_wench83 October 4 2010, 09:56:56 UTC

Wow! What a fantastic fic! You did such a great job of setting the mood and creating such a wonderful scene and with so few words! I especially LOVED the last line. Way to go, you! I do hope you feel compelled to write more.

rainbowjumpsuit October 4 2010, 11:50:32 UTC

THANK YOU! I'm really glad you think I set the mood well. With these two that's a big part of the whole thing. I'm still not sure if I'll be writing more but I've gotten so much great feedback I'll definitely consider it.

alidiabin October 4 2010, 19:42:28 UTC

I loved this. So short but so well writen.

rainbowjumpsuit October 4 2010, 19:56:01 UTC

Thank you very much!

*Gulp* ext_973150 January 8 2012, 10:00:10 UTC

I don't know what you were nervous about, because that was totally hot, haha. That was actually really good!

And I love that you can write with proper grammar and punctuation :P I love the grenade and explosion metaphors, too (yes, I'm aware of the no_safety_pin challenge). You used them very appropriately, and to good effect!