Comments | rainbowlemons: Checkmate

rainbowlemons

Checkmate

Oct 30, 2009 00:41

Whee! XD

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Comments 15

fighting_wotsit October 27 2009, 19:42:13 UTC

I like the abrupt ending, it manages to sum everything up and give the illusion of continuation without being the only part of the story to stick to mind. No, I definately liked it. It was beautiful.

rainbowlemons October 28 2009, 08:15:39 UTC

Aww, thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :D

fighting_wotsit October 28 2009, 11:07:07 UTC

theablackthorn October 27 2009, 20:43:22 UTC

It wasn't abrupt at all I really loved it. Sasuke was so shocker *giggle*

rainbowlemons October 28 2009, 08:18:28 UTC

Oh, Sasuke XD
Thank you :D

theablackthorn October 28 2009, 08:52:11 UTC

Happy to darlin' :)

syrraki October 27 2009, 21:06:12 UTC

Haha, it's cute! But picking up the pieces is probably annoying....

You DO have a few tense mistakes though, from past to present and back. I do it too, so don't worry too much XD.

rainbowlemons October 28 2009, 08:19:33 UTC

Yeah, I do that a lot. -___-
But thanks for commenting and pointing it out! :D

elfinmouse October 28 2009, 14:37:31 UTC

I love the way Naruto is not quite certain when he moves that final piece, then Sasuke's shock.

That Line, "Huh...So this is what victory tastes like." is one of my favorite lines from a fic in a while. :D

rainbowlemons October 28 2009, 17:50:29 UTC

That was the feeling I was going for- like Naruto accidentally won. Heee, that was my favorite line, too! XD

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rainbowlemons October 29 2009, 08:31:04 UTC

Lol, I was finally able to squeeze this fic out. I was having a hard time with the other one. :\

Thank you so much! It means a lot to me :D :D :D