Little Messiah

[rainyinterludes]

She had stood by the window, every afternoon, for the last five years. Everyday, she saw the children run down from their homes on the mountain. From her window, the mountain seemed like an ominous barrier, but when the children emerged from it, it became a faraway fairy land. They lived in the villages strewn across the region. She watched them,

Comments

[mistymonsoon]

This is beautiful and I could actually see the ray of hope in her desolate life (told you before this was really very good).

[rainyinterludes]

Hmm thank you...wish i too could see that ray more often!

[hotchocolate29]

I liked it very much - very subtle, very vivid and in its short space packs in a lot thart is both said and unsaid...bhalo achish?

[hotchocolate29]

sos, typo, that hobe and not thart! By the way your work should make you write more if this is the result:)))

[rainyinterludes]

Thank you. Amar ektu boka bokai legeche galpota-jakge.Han thik thak achi. Tui ki shift kore gechis?

sabai bhalo bolle hoi naki?

[anonymous]

tah ektu boka boka achey -- chaliye jah -- i wish i'cd write like u!

stories to come to the level of your journal will take its own time -- so do not worry!

if i were u -- i'd 've written stories in the same genre as ur journals - w/o trying to pack too much punch into too short a frame -- feminism ta arektu subtle hote parto, promiscuity-ta arektu better reflected hote parto --..

rabindranath pora hole -- banofool poris ektu -- probably might realize what u cd have left out of your story and yet had made the same statements with a greater impact!

Re: sabai bhalo bolle hoi naki?

[rainyinterludes]

He he he ota live journal er funda shabai shabai ke bhalo bole!

Gr8 to hear from you, tahole finally khuleche tomar okhane site ta!
Tumio join kore jao tahole amra ek anya ke constructive criticism dite pari.

It was written in 30 minutes. Feminism ta unintended, promiscuity kothai dekhle, ota to ekta baccha chele(!), tobe haan i agree besh boka boka.

I shall try to read a bit of banaphool, ei creative writing ta ami besh kharapi kori.

this is a better way to keep in touch than orkut, jetar invitationo tomai pathiyechi

[sthira]

You have a wonderful journal tucked in here!

[rainyinterludes]

Thank you! I discovered your journal yesterday and really liked the way you write. I have studied English LIterature, but have always wished could study Philosophy too!

[sthira]

I think we should have Joint Honours programs in Indian Universities that offer those options. Studying a subject as a part of a degree is a totally different ballgame altogether. I think at times that I'd be happy just studying different subjects and doing degrees all my life!

Improve the ending!

[anonymous]

The ending is a bit weak and predictable. It started well and would have made a good start for a bigger story.

Re: Improve the ending!

[rainyinterludes]

I agree-even i did not like the ending-somehow beginnings seem easier to script than endings...