Week 29 "Milkshake Duck"

[rayaso]

I have used all three prompts in each of the triple-prompt entries, including this one. For Gary’s purposes, the prompt for this story is “milkshake duck,” which I have not designated as an entry's prompt before.

THE BOUNTY HUNTERA duck milkshake, properly made, is creamy, frosty cold, and has a real kick at the end. It goes down easy and for many

Comments

[viagra]

I laughed until I threw up in my mouth a little (or was that just the effect of the opening?) - of course Death would have two of those milkshakes.

I really enjoyed this, I've gotta say. This story is like the epitome of your style; I always like your treatment of fantastic elements, and you're so good at building characters in such a short space!

[rayaso]

"I laughed until I threw up in my mouth a little" -- now that is a high compliment! Maybe some time I can write something that will make you throw up all the way. I also appreciate the rest of your comment. If I could type one of those blush things, I would. Coming from a writer of your abilities, it means a lot to me.

[dadi]

From a disgusting beginning to a great story :) Love it!

[rayaso]

Having people throw up at the beginning of a story is probably risky, but it ended with saving a baby's life, so I guess that balances out. A duck milkshake probably not stay long in my stomach, but I'm not Death. Thank you so much for your comment.

[lyssa027]

I really liked this :) Death as a character was so awesome.

[rayaso]

I haven't written about Death before, so I'm glad it worked for you. He isn't evil, like Satan; he's just a skeleton in charge of gathering souls at their appointed time. I'm glad you liked it.

[lyssa027]

I always found portrayals of death in books/movies fascinating ;)

[xlovebecomesher]

This is great!

[rayaso]

Thank you!

[encrefloue]

That opener feels like a doomlet kicking me in the stomach! Subjecting the reader to that bit of playful malice set the right tone for this darkly whimsical jaunt. Nicely done!

[rayaso]

The openings to some stories hit the reader like a punch to the stomach. I went a different way. The milkshake duck is, when properly made, revolting. Of course, it's revolting when poorly made, too. It's an all-purpose emetic. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.