Devil's Food

May 14, 2004 18:08

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corndawg54 May 15 2004, 16:19:43 UTC
That is so original! It is not crappy! Ur so talented! My friend is sooo jealous! She's a writer too...she also thinks ur attrative! I told her soo!

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raygoldentree May 15 2004, 16:30:54 UTC
:P uhm, Thanks?

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? corndawg54 May 16 2004, 16:46:34 UTC
oh...well happy happy joy joy.My friend is absested w/ Ren And Stimpy!!!

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Re: ? raygoldentree May 16 2004, 17:38:59 UTC
why is that :P

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Re: I like your hat raygoldentree May 15 2004, 23:24:55 UTC
its an eddie bauer hate, i do listen to tunes and i think up how it might sound like listening to different beats, then i just sing it in my heart and just write what i feel.

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Re: I like your hat raygoldentree May 15 2004, 23:44:49 UTC
sleep what is that?

when you write you shouldn't force it, it should come freely, should be natural and from the soul, words are better than paint, because you can shape and form them whatever way you wish and tweak them better, and make them more beautiful than any painting.

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Crappy yeah right... sexier_than_you May 16 2004, 01:18:44 UTC
Gosh that was freaking awesome!
+Voice
+Flow of words
+Descriptive
+Flavorful
+Vivid

How can THAT poem be crappy? You know what poem would be crappy here let me think of one...Okay.

"A heart shattered girl, after a long harsh break up, sobbing shivering hiding, blood covered clothes with holes, signs of abuse all over the room, grey stormy sky peering in, how did this all happen...rapid shatters, violent blows, slicing knives, torn up clothes, silent screams, no body knows, fresh blood stains, shrieks of hurt, throbbing hearts, piercing pains, scowled expressions, lashing chains."(c)mercedes04

I'm not good at quick poems, but hey NOW I have proven that yours is like an illuminating star compared to mine!

Take care.

xoxo <3<3

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Re: Crappy yeah right... raygoldentree May 16 2004, 08:07:18 UTC
Comparing poetry, is like asking the PLO to gather the palestines and ask them polietly to stop sucide attacking and them have them polietly nod their heads realize what they are doing and go fishing, while telling the israelis to move back a bit and share their country. Immpossible. to many perspectives, rationals, and personal enjoyments.

But, I liked yers.

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amandah05 May 17 2004, 06:57:17 UTC
the poem was good....post on my lj and help me out... Idont know what to do

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