Amazingly Bad Poetry Journal Review - Winter Warmth

Sep 03, 2011 19:18

Winter Warmth
by KyleWhen tall trees groan in bitter wind ( Read more... )

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Iambic Tetrameter, Son ext_784312 September 11 2011, 08:24:42 UTC
Hey prof, the word "do" actually looks very necessary from a metrical perspective. Those are iambs, four of them to a line, which makes this a much more technically adept poem than what you generally target.

I agree that the last stanza is a pile of warm goo but you can't go maligning formalism. I mean, you can, but it makes you look kind of ignorant.

Other than that, I appreciate what you do here. Keep fighting the fight, gov.

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purebeing October 9 2011, 22:05:24 UTC
"when brittle twigs do bear their claws" made me think of bears with twigs for claws. Do you think that's what he was going for?

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