HAY GUYS, I NEED SOME HELP

[rebmastu]

Alright, sooooo, Turtle Paradise is currently recruiting applicants for, like, ALL positions, so I've been making up tests for the past couple of days. Making up mock typesetting and editing tests was easy enough, but I'm SUPER stuck on the quality control (proofreading) test. @_@ I mean, it's one thing to write something inherently craptasticular

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[ceruleanghost]

"...as he strode to stand before Naga and me," sounds awkward. How about just "as he stood before Naga and me,"? Unless the "strode" part is very significant...

That's all I can see for the moment. What really helps is printing it out and correcting it--you'll see lots of stuff you missed on the computer screen. ;D (at least, I always do...)

[rebmastu]

Nonono, shmookie! I NEED IT DESTROYED, DESTROOOOYYYYED xD

Ohwait, I see how you got that. Crap, I phrased it badly. I actually need to change the passage's grammar to be REALLY REALLY BAD, so I can use it for so other people can QC it, uh, if that makes any sense at all. @_@ Brb, changing post up a bit, lawl.

Re: This hurts me to do but I can do better and more if you'd like.

[rebmastu]

NAHAHAHAHAHAH, FABULOUS

I shall use this, I shall use this! MOAR WHERE THIS CAME FROM, PLEASE. XD