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reddenish September 8 2011, 22:44:28 UTC
thank you ^^

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romelena September 7 2011, 17:04:51 UTC
I read this story at winglin but you neved end it. Will you complete this story now?
I can't wait to know will Jae's family pay for their cruelty or not?

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reddenish September 8 2011, 22:43:44 UTC
i never end it there because my english is suck, and i'm not cenfidece with it ^^.
this story actually already complete, but just not beta-ed yet. so yeah, all we can do just wait... hahahaha :P
anyway, thanks for reading ^^

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happymystar September 7 2011, 17:55:01 UTC
I think I read this on winglin before, its a great plot, I hope you keep on going with this fic :)
Is the one on winglin will not continue anymore?

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reddenish September 8 2011, 22:41:42 UTC
yeah, i start writing this fic in winglin before. but you see, my english is suck, i'm not very comfertable with the way i'm writing the fic, so i'm looking for beta who can do the english part.
glad i'm find her now, how much i'm updating and how long this fic will take now depend on her. please support her neh ^^
i dont think i will continuing the one in winglin tho, 'cause oh well... i just think i cant ^^
thank you for reading, i really love comment ^^

p.s : i think i have read your fanfic before, the story is about reality show called 'we got maried' is it? or am i wrong? O.o

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brownbox72 September 7 2011, 19:01:27 UTC
Hey there! This is an awesome plot! I’m gonna really like this story, I know it! ^_ ( ... )

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stoned69 September 8 2011, 17:21:18 UTC
Hey, I'm Rien ^^ Thanks so much for bothering to comment on the structure and written expression on this chapter :D Am hoping you will do so again on future chapters. I really love critics! LOL
But hey, this line is still incomplete, I think LOL I don’t think you need the : there. What was it that you wanted to tell? ^^

Ah, yeah, no, I don't think they wanted to ask whether or not Jaejoong is happy too. (Or did they, Cha, author? O.o) So yeah, the one you corrected (You do too, don't you) is the right one. I think. LOL Thanks :)

Hahaha no no no English is still viewed as a foreign language here in Indonesia. We really don't use English on daily basis :/
Thanks for the wishes; good luck to us! LOOL

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brownbox72 September 8 2011, 19:24:15 UTC
For the incomplete sentence.. I just wanted to say you didn't need that colon there. ":" I think I was saying that you could've just made that into a new sentence instead of adding that : there. As far as I know a colon is used for listing things or giving an explanation. I think you know that though cuz you use it well later I believe. But the colon in that sentence make it very long, that's all. You also have a semicolon there too, maybe that's why.

This is soo weird cuz I'm am by nooo means an English major! haha I'm going for Medical School so my grammar is not even that great! But I really hope this helps you. I'll try to look out for somethings in future chapters but I doubt there will be anything ^_^ You're editing is great!

Keep going! :)

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stoned69 September 9 2011, 06:33:56 UTC
Ohh.. so it was me who misunderstood :)) Alrighty, I got it :D Yeah, a colon is used for listing things/giving an explanation .__. It's just that the original sentence was so much longer than that, maybe I got confused ^^;; (Cha tended to form a very long sentence in only one paragraph LOL *bricked*) Haha yeah, I like using semicolon. I used many of it in my own story :))

LOL it's fine! And woah you go to Med School? Studying to be a doctor? Heh, you are smart, eh? ;) Aww thank you so much! You don't know how happy I am when I read your comment <3 For future chapters, yoroshiku onegaishimasu! xD Thank you thank you thank you! Your comment made my daay~~~ <3

XOXO

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nur_denz September 7 2011, 20:03:04 UTC
poor jae, how could they ask him to sacrifice himself over and over again... T_T yeah just show them urself jae, don't let them use u like nothing... :( hope to see u update soon ^^

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reddenish September 8 2011, 22:28:45 UTC
thanks ^^
how fast i'm updating is.... depend to how much damage in my brain took all my memories. if it's just a small cut, then i will update VERY fast, (what am i talking about?) :P

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