Finally, the start of a new fic.

[redoren]

Okay, I've been promising a fic to people for a while now. It began as a Roslin/Baltar fic, then I had the idea for a fic focused on things relating to the latest episodes of season four and my theories regarding certain aspects of the show aired so far. Now I have combined the two ideas and the chapters I had already worked on and I have decided

Comments

[fm_dolly]

This is a really interesting start. I love your use of Tory.

Roslin/Balar? Hell yes. There is something dark and angry and twisted about that and I find it quite delicious and complex. Can't wait to see what happens next

[redoren]

Yay! I'm glad you like Tory in this. I'm finding writing for her really enjoyable. She's a very good character in supporting the development of others. She kind of pushes the story along nicely, plus she's a fun character to write for. She's a little odd. She can be one thing one moment, and a totally separate thing in another.

Roslin/Balar? Hell yes. Heeee! Glad you approve. The Roslin Baltar scenes should be making an appearance in Chapter Three.

[millari]

This is interesting. You certainly have left me hanging about what this "truth" is Roslin is hiding. Sounds intriguing, and I'll be waiting to see the next part to find out!

Some lines I liked:
It was a race now, which would expire first? The cancer…or the rest of her?
This was so sad, yet so true. And it reminds us of what drives Laura to be so hardcore this season so far - she's in a race against death, and she doesn't have time to mince words, take chances. Usually, the prospect of oncoming death frees people up, makes them more willing to take risks; it's so interesting that in Laura's case, it makes her more conservative and paints her into corners. You did a good job of reminding us of what motivates her, while at the same time, dangling an tantalizing unknown motivation before us.

The younger woman instinctively drew her clipboard up across her chest, holding it there unconsciously like a shield.I like this line a lot. A minor detail, but I could really see it

[redoren]

WOW! I can't thank you enough for your comment ::hugs:: I love feedback, but especially feedback that gives me examples!!! I love examples!

I agree with you. Baltar totally wants to get into Roslin's pants. He's a kinky one.

I'm glad you like the excerpt I made up for Adama's book. I was randomly typing and it just kind of appeared on the page, so I used it :)

[setsunacutey]

Very nice, Redoren! :) I love the Tom and Laura bits, Tory being her usual protect-Laura-from-evil-press self and well, it comes at a good time after the first three eps. Makes me reflect on all what happened so far.

Laura/Baltar, where are you? ;) It's such an awkward but fitting pairing that I tend to like it even. Bring it on!

[redoren]

LOL! Oh trust me, Laura/Baltar is NOT going to be a smooth ride. Cetainly not fluffy white clouds stuff.

Anyway, finishing off Chapter Two now, posting soon.

[johnliz4ever]

I really like this. Lee's a persistent little bunny isn't he.

Poor Tory, had to feel sorry for her. :)

Love the way you wrote Laura, especially the way you wrote her taking off her glasses because they way you wrote it is the way she does it and I could see it in my head. It was a great visual

*Runs to read chapter 2*

[redoren]

Yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Chapter three will be up before the end of the weekend, perhaps before the end of tomorrow if I manage to beat my muse into giving me clarity. Right now I'm churning out little drabbles all over the place. I might just post all of those to get them out of my system and then concentrate my attention on chapter three :)

[egeria61]

*tacklehugs* I don't know how I missed this earlier! What a promising first chapter. Before I race over to read the second, I'll just say how much I love your depiction of Roslin/Zarek. The little "pleasure" of pissing Roslin off was fantastic. And, this is just how I see Roslin reacting to Zarek:
she had no intention of letting him push her into outward anger

And, I think Zarek's "partial" betrayal of Roslin is frakking brilliant. Brilliant. It's the reason I pimp your fiction, remember? Hehehe. xoxoxo

~R

[redoren]

LOL! I love that you are my fic-pimp ::tacklhugs back::

I'm really pleased you like this one and if you like my Roslin/Zarek, you might like Chapter three :)