Forsaken - Chapter Three - Contest Entry

[redturtleotaku]

Despite his bodies reluctance Jin felt his mind crawling towards consciousness. He groaned quietly and willed himself to return to the blissful depths of slumber but the memories from the previous day were creeping forth and facilitating his journey to wakefulness.

His father was dead, his best friend an addict and two rooms away slept a handsome

Comments

[agustin1982]

New Updateeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeessssssss~~~~~

Yayyyyy~~~

I love it^^ ♥

[redturtleotaku]

Thank you! Glad to hear it :D

[kawaiikame]

Their relationship is way too complicated for their own good, I know from where Kame's emotions coming from and how a man would feel like to be treated like a girl .. I think he do has a bit of confusion inside himself as what he exactly feels about Jin, he still want to kiss Jin but at the same those feelings might be way too alien and new for him to adjust it just like that and right away. The more time that pass by I think the better and more relaxing Kame would feel about being with Jin.

As for Jin, I think he's pretty weak and lonely. He's too tired to even try to change how the people think about him because he simply lost the hope and the courage to even try. Being left alone tired him up. I hope Kame will be able to lighten his heart ♥

Can't wait for moar :D

[redturtleotaku]

Their relationship may get even more complicated yet...the story has just started :p They're both very confused about how to feel right now and uncertain about what they want from each other.
You're right about both of them, and Jin especially is a lot more vulnerable than anyone realises.
Kazuya will certainly have an effect on him one way or the other!
Thank you for the thoughtful comment! I've started work on Chapter Four!

[are_in]

♥♥♥♥♥
love this chap...
Jin's starting to change...
hope kazuya're able to bring out the true Jin...hahaha
thanks for the update~~

[redturtleotaku]

Thank you. Jin is going to be much easier to change than Kazuya. Despite outward appearances he is definitely the more vulnerable of the pair.
Thanks for the comment! I'm working on the next part now.

[pop_power]

OH DEAR GOD I LOVE KAME XD
I can just see him sat with women practicing shamisen and being laughed at xDD but bless him, it must be hard. Naughty Jin seems to be using Kame as something like a puppet, like making him express himself, do humiliating things, get angry etc while he sits back and observes. Just cos you're inflicting things upon an emotionally screwed and loud person doesn't mean you're feeling or expressing things too! He needs to realise he be human too mate.
So yeah, I love Kame. And how impossible it is for him to be angry and cool lol

[redturtleotaku]

I'm glad that you spotted the comedy here :p *pats Kame on the head*
Yep Jin's a bad boy but he doesn't mean to be! They're both just emotionally screwed as you said lol
*whispers* Leslie! ;D

[pinkporca]

I loved this chapter. There was something so gentle and nice about it in the end, as if Jin wanted to bear his soul. Nice job. Thanks

[redturtleotaku]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! It's kind of tricky to write sometimes because the way I'm picturing them they're both completely screwed up emotionally! I hope I'm expressing them ok though.
Thank you for reading and commenting :)