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[reef4definit]

But my left hand smudges each line

Comments

[purestglory]

wowwwwww. i just typed eoeee instead of wowww and then went back and changed it but i kind of like eoeeee better. so eoe, this poem is really good. you really should join a poetry community on here so i'm not the only one critiquing. this style REALLY works for you. whatever state of mind you were in when you wrote it...remember it. it's got this beat that i love. if you can go back and write one more stanza, (eeff or efef, duh) then it can be a couplet and you can call it ode to my left hand that smudges each line. and please download some ani difranco, this poem reminds me of her poems. really, really good whinits. i'm glad to see you're writing poetry on this topic, too, rather than sad emo lonely things. love love love.

[purestglory]

haha, sonnet, not couplet. i'm d-u-m.

[reef4definit]

I jointed two communities here actually, but only post on one (poems). And I can't download any music here, all the firewalls. I know, it sucks, I'll have to wait til I go home, but thank you for the comment :)

[laser_cat]

i don't know anything about poetry, but i have a feeling that this is really good. also, because i think it is.

[reef4definit]

hah, thanks!