You made my heart hurt, but then you made it better!! This is really good *_* I love the way it unfolds, how you're not quite sure what's going on at first. I love how the parts that are from Takki's POV are just timestamps from a schedule; it seems so cold and impersonal and really sort of hammers in what it is the problem is without saying it at all and it's really cool *__* I love the way you show their different ways of dealing with things, and just. Yeah. *___*
He remembers their concert two weeks ago when he had his arm around Hideaki and believed, in that one moment, that he had Hideaki’s full focus. He thinks about how rarely he has it, how much he always wants it, but how he’ll probably never have it and some stranger will, instead.
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You made my heart hurt, but then you made it better!! This is really good *_* I love the way it unfolds, how you're not quite sure what's going on at first. I love how the parts that are from Takki's POV are just timestamps from a schedule; it seems so cold and impersonal and really sort of hammers in what it is the problem is without saying it at all and it's really cool *__* I love the way you show their different ways of dealing with things, and just. Yeah. *___*
He remembers their concert two weeks ago when he had his arm around Hideaki and believed, in that one moment, that he had Hideaki’s full focus. He thinks about how rarely he has it, how much he always wants it, but how he’ll probably never have it and some stranger will, instead.
Ahhh these lines, so good! *_*
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