Ok guys, I RRRRREEEALLLLYY need yor help!
I had to write a trial article to get onto the school newspaper. I tried to make it sort of weird: I know most people would write a plain article and I really wanted to stand out. Only problem: if this attempt at being sacracstic really doesn't come through as sarcasm, I'll look like a fool.So guys, could you PLEASE read this and offer criticism...
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I kid.
Okay. Overall: I like it. I like the idea, I like the spunk. The only things that need work are technicalities and details and shit like that.
I suppose it would be helpful if I gave you some actual pointers, so you have some idea of what I'm talking about.
It had to make me appear funny, witty, sarcastic, smart, innovative, truthful, and, most-importantly, make me seem far more important than what I really am: the dreaded freshman.
Perhaps tweak it just a bit to say something like: "In it, I wanted to appear funny, witty, sarcastic, smart, innovative, truthful [I would hit up the thesaurus, and play with the order, just so you have a bit more fluidity in that list], and, most importantly, far more important than what I really am: the dreaded [mmmm...again, thesaurus time, because I'm not sure that 'dreaded' is precisely what you mean to say] freshman."
Every day, my friends would tell me"Every day, my friends told me" ...pure nitpickiness, I know, but since you started out in ( ... )
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