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refractive

from back before from back before

Sep 29, 2006 15:26

There once was a fellow named steve. he had a huge head. he was nine years old and green. he had stick-up hair and bulging eyes. he didnt really look too creepy, but he looked a bit like a chihuahua. no no, pudgier than a chihuahua. big cheeks, slender neck, tiny bony shoulders with a rootbeer belly. chicken thin legs ( Read more... )

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carinareena September 30 2006, 16:08:12 UTC

go to yoga!

carinareena September 30 2006, 21:31:51 UTC

i mean, i really like it too. like, actually really.

bentplug September 30 2006, 19:04:55 UTC

Loved it. Loved it. Loved it.

You're a great writer.

refractive September 30 2006, 21:38:35 UTC

thank you thank you thank you.

shmiley October 5 2006, 18:34:43 UTC

if this is geared towards a 5-10 year old audience, may I make an editorial suggestion?

another rock was thrown and they stopped. well, horace stopped and steve stopped shortly after.

horace whipped around and turned to sam and arthur and dakota. he pointed a finger and walked to them.

an inch from their face, he stopped.

"hey!"

he was panting. heaving chest, bobbing head, shaky fingers.

"duck you."

his eyes only left sam to turn around and walk away with steve.

other than that, brilliant.