In which regret filled him...

[reishicolleen]

Title: Baseball Idiot
Author: Reishi
Rating: T
Warning: shounen-ai
Pairing: 8059, 1859
Disclaimer: don’t own anything, as always.

Comments

[xcerpted]

You probably shouldn't put A/N's in the middle of your story as it kind of kills the mood.^^;; You've gotten a lot better at sticking to the past tense; the fourth paragraph sticks out like a sore thumb though. A couple of typos here and there, like "Whatever pat you choose".

I'm not sure about coma people being capable of out-of-body experience...but saying it does happen, I really like the scene of Gokudera appearing at Yamamoto's game. Sweet, with an undertone of eeriness. The ending seems kind of rushed (and bitin!!xD) but overall I really enjoyed the fic.^_^

[dicks]

For a moment I thought he gonna die. ;A; But I love the way it ended. <3

[phantomkai]

i almost got on the flow of story, i though it will be a sad ending though, the twist was great n.n