I take the challenge!

[dropsofviolet]

reviewers_inc:
Name of Challenge: Story Behind the Picture
Title: First Argument
Author/Penname: rhap_chan
Rating: G
Summary: Nadeshiko loved the early mornings, and Fugitaka loved her.
Disclaimer: Cardcaptor Sakura belongs to CLAMP.

Comments

[claire_chan]

Awwww!! That's such a cute detail, their scents on the bedsheets. I liked how sweet it was ^_^ The first sentence was a little ominous, the whole part how they were only just married and that was why Nadeshiko was smiling. It makes me think, hmmm, might Fujitaka and Touya be hiding from Sakura marital difficulty before Nadeshiko's death? And in the seven years since it, Nadeshiko's ghost had forgiven it? That would make a really fascinating fanfic..

The only thing that really gnawed at me was Fujitaka/Fugitaka and we've been over this and s'okay. XDD

[dropsofviolet]

I suppose I am incurable. I never spell-check, as I am a good speller, and Microsoft would have marked them both as wrong, so that wouldn't help either...

Your thought would make a good fic, but I was thinking that Nadeshiko enjoyed folding the sheets. It was a new thing to her, this marriage, and everything was fun. She probably loved doing the dishes with him.

Thanks for the comment. ^_^

[sheila_chan]

The details were simply ♥. Considering Nadeshiko's background, she is likely to enjoy folding the sheets or any household chore. Incorporating smells in your descriptions was a good choice, most tend to keep their descriptions visual when there's an array of senses to explore^^. Forgive for me being slow (I barely slept) but what was the argument all about? Did you really intend to keep it vague?

[dropsofviolet]

Thank you. ^_^

Yes, I did intend to keep it vague. Really, what would they argue about? It would be something silly... ^___^

[little_kraehe]

That was so cute~♥ and I could never imagine the two fighting~!

I agree with Sheila with the senses thing. That's what Sir Los Baños kept telling me and I kept ignoring him. Ah, well~! ^_____^

I have to say that your sentences need to be redone a little though. Some of them were too long and detailed that their subjects were kinda confusing which was which. But all in all, I don't see anything wrong. ^___^

[dropsofviolet]

Thank you. ^_^

I'll have to look at the sentences thing. That tends to be my writing style, a poetical sort of idea, and I can see how that would be confusing....

But thanks.

[suppis_tenshi]

I read all your 30_kisses responses, so I was curious to see what you would do for this challenge, and I wasn't dissapointed! ^^ Great scene, if a little short, I like the peek into the domestic side of married life, because so few authors address it. Love to see more, if you're ever so inclined!

~^_^~