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Bring forth the Jury!!!

Aug 04, 2007 08:38

Title: (Currently title-less, HELP!!!!! XD)
Author/Penname: Kainasilverbane
Rating: PG-13 (for later chapters)
Chapters: Preface (WIP)
Pairings: None, Eriol centered
Summary: How did Eriol become the enigmatic character he is today? This is my take on what could have happened. Mild crossover with xxxholic
Warning, Notes: This is very much my ( Read more... )

Comments 4

claire_chan August 4 2007, 23:25:46 UTC

Oh, do continue!

As for title suggestions... maybe something like "Portrait of the Magician as a Young Man"? Yoinked from James Joyce. xD

It's hard to be especially grammatical since it's a piece written in the voice of a character.

kainasilverbane August 5 2007, 01:41:30 UTC

Yes! I felt so weird writing in his voice, I still don't have it very accurate. You're very good at it, any pointers?

*dives into more drawings of fake screenies* I should really track down some inking pens before I do more of these...*twitch...twitch* Nope...can't!! *already has one done and choosing another scene to cap*

claire_chan August 5 2007, 02:56:23 UTC

Thank you! Hmm. Eriol has a really ponderous tone. He considers everything. He is intelligent, a bit playful, and exceedingly polite. He has a sense of humour, but also broods a bit. Now that I think of it, he may be very attentive towards proper grammar. I try to use British spellings/phrases with him to really give a sense of his not being from Tomoeda, but I really seriously run that by people who live in England. xD

I can't wait to see more!

little_kraehe August 5 2007, 14:33:43 UTC

I've had a few problems with the punctuation marks, the full stops and the commas, also the parallelism of the tenses but I find this drabble-ish quite amusing.

And... I agree with Claire~! Eriol sounds light-hearted and sometimes tend to overcomplicate simple things as if to confuse people. It's really a charming start~♥