NaNo - Day 1

[rhetoricians]

I am feeling pretty good about this so far! It's been a hot minute since I've written NaNo (not since 2007, in fact), but I am really enjoying what I have thus far. It's under the cut, if you're interested! I would very, very much appreciate feedback, especially in these early stages. (just please keep in mind this is a draft and is not exactly

Comments

[rhetoricians]

It only took about an hour and some change. Not bad. You can do it! Don't give up, you haven't even started yet!

[zombiefruit]

First-draft-wise? Excellent. I have read finished drafts that were less polished (although, obviously, they were rejected for publication, those were still final drafts rather than first ones).

[rhetoricians]

Oh, that's good. I'm more concerned about whether or not the story is engaging than if it's well-written at this point, but I'm glad nonetheless!

[zombiefruit]

:)

[marblesonglass]

You wrote a great start. I need to learn how to write description as awesomely as you. :D

[rhetoricians]

I always feel like I could do better with descriptions. :( I think I could have been more vivid.

[zombiefruit]

The problem is that, if you get TOO vivid, the whole thing becomes really cloying and awful to read. Too much of a good thing, etc.

[rhetoricians]

Yeah, I think I struck a good balance. But sometimes I get carried away with writing and just want to keep going.

[brkfastatholly]

i think this is a really great start! i definitely think it's engaging - i'm hooked already and can't wait to see what's next. :D
your writing in the dream sequence is really amazing and i love the details about the painting and everything.
i do think that the dialogue (if you can call it a dialogue) with Vivian and the cat is a little awkward. i mean, i talk to my cat all the time and maybe it sounds just as awkward as this, but idk something just seems a little off about it to me.
still, i do really like the whole bit between the two, especially thinking about the connection between cats/witches/occult and that sort of thing.

[xoesotericox]

I just hit no on the poll but changed my mind. This looks like it could be interesting. Please leave me in the filter, thanks.