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riastarstruck

[FIC] Patchwork Heroes

Sep 03, 2009 19:27

Title: Patchwork Heroes -Chapter Four
Author: RiaStarStruck (me!)
Rating: R
Pairing: VAM
Summary: They were just two regular teenagers for the most part, but when they meet each other they have to start dealing with the demons that lurk in their shadows. Snapshots of how they found each other, and how it became more.
Disclaimer: nope, none of the ( Read more... )

slash, [fic], vam, patchwork heroes

Comments 23

evilydelicious September 3 2009, 19:41:58 UTC

I did a little happy dance when I saw this. I'm so into the story and can't wait for more.

Good luck on your assignments btw :)

riastarstruck September 4 2009, 02:05:17 UTC

*does happy dance at comment*
yay! so happy you liked it!

...yeah, that assignment... i should really keep going with that... *cries* i dont wanna!
thanks for the luck, i need it!

mariana_lico September 3 2009, 19:58:05 UTC

Poor Willa. :(

x_eevie September 4 2009, 05:54:57 UTC

I really like Missy's character in this one, it just seems like you portray her in a very 'real' feeling way.
Loved this chapter!

riastarstruck September 4 2009, 08:13:52 UTC

i like Missy, i think she's cool and i didnt want to potray her as a real bitch or shallow or something just because i would be more convinent.
i'm glad she came across as 'real' thanks for the comment!

alicez17 September 4 2009, 08:13:07 UTC

I really do love this story, and this chapter even more. I have to agree with the others that the angst is rather heart-wrenching, for the lack of a better word.

I love Bam's protective nature of Ville, and I have to make a note on Missy's observation skills, I thought they were rather good:) Also, I am glad to see that you did NOT make Missy act like a bitch when she 'found out' Bam was not into her.

Sorry about all the rambling, but please do update soon! I had one more question; are you still looking for a beta? I would happily offer myself as one:)

riastarstruck September 4 2009, 09:14:00 UTC

thank you! i'm so happy you like it! this is my favourite chapter, it turned out well i think.
i like missy, i think she's cool an didnt want to portray her as a bitch or a bimbo, and i could see her being observant, or maybe just open minded.

and yeah, i would definatly like a beta! lol, though i've never had one before and i dont know proper protocol... it would be great if you could do it!

alicez17 September 5 2009, 07:42:00 UTC

I'm not sure if there is a protocol, but I think you should send me your next chapter by e-mail, so I can look it over before you decide to post it:)

My e-mail is: ifollowmyownpath@hotmail.com

riastarstruck September 10 2009, 13:49:01 UTC

okay! chapter is written and sent!

greendayhero September 6 2009, 01:23:29 UTC

I like it! :D