the poem for english, as of yet untitled

[ridefour15]

He looked her in the eye

Comments

[godisangry]

Good but no so cool, too close to the real thing.

[salsa311]

As you requested, I shall comment. Your poem is quality. Adding the bits of dialogue at the end of each stanza is superb. Also, the first and last stanzas are the best which I find to be a good aspect of a poem. First one draws you and the last one "clinches" it.

I'm done making a horses arse out of myself...for now.

[theflipside02]

it's good, i always like expression through quotes. did you write it recently?

[ridefour15]

I wrote it yesterday in like 10 minutes afer my physics homework haha