Fic: Cold [Moonlight, PG]

[rijane99]

I have a massive China paper due. So instead I've written a quick bit of Moonlight fic. Be gentle because I'm rusty and sensitive.

Cold

Beth thought she'd be brave. She'd bite her lip and soldier on. Never thought she'd be a screamer, that when the pain ripped through her she would cry like a little girl. Even though Mick liked to remind her that the

Comments

[touchshriek]

Break my heart why don't you.

Also, the 'Mick, miiiick, miii-' might be a bit of overkill. Maybe just 'Mick, miii-' would do?

You handled the heat/cold thing you had going on in this fic really well. Along with the fact that Mick can't always be the rescuer, and Beth can't always be rescued. Really good.

Now finish your paper! ^_^

[rijane99]

Fair point on the Mick bit - thanks for the kind words and the good advice :)

[dargai]

I love the associations of memories and images. Josh and Mick, and all the vampires. I like that Beth is shocked too; it makes sense that a little of the vampire's perceived invincibility has rubbed off onto her.

And, unlike touchshriek, I am steadfastly going to believe that the cold above her is Mick.

[rijane99]

Thanks - I like to think on some level Beth is terribly irritated by the reality of her vulnerability. If I had a walking vampire shield like Mick, I might forget about consequences myself.
And re: the ending, uh, that's what you choose to believe, I'm not going to stop you...