A smirk flirts across his mouth, but quickly vanishes in the face of her obvious distress. “Well,” he drops to his knees at her feet, sets his elbows on the arms of the chair, “it’s not as if you’ve spent much time with good ol’ Donut, lately, have you?” he murmurs seductively.
Mmmmmmmm. Is is suddenly hotter in here? ;D For real, what does Veronica want with Donut anyway? I just love the description here, and what he does, the way he wins her over from all of her Donut pouting, guuuh.
“He’s my son, and he does what I tell him to. Do you understand me?”
I know when we were talking earlier you said that when you write you wait for the characters to speak to you, and dude, I can hear Aaron's voice in my head in the part where he grabs Veronica. It's so right, it's scary, with all the rrrrs when he says her name. Because Aaron really did that and man it was creepy, the way her rolled her name around and everything else he said.
Looking up into his stormy, confused eyes, she impulsively rises on tiptoe and gently kisses his
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Logan is sooo seductive, isn't he? Gah - I love writing him trying to win her over, over and over.... Hee! I think that's what's so fun about this universe - he's not quite the OPJ he becomes, but he already has the sauve, slinky charm we love about him.
My reasoning for the Holiday Inn Express is that: a) they needed to leave Neptune, cuz I wouldn't put it past Aaron to go looking for the Xterra; b) they're only 15, and trying to stay incognito, under the radar - and who'd be looking for them at the Express; c) a big, middle class, impersonal hotel would be a more logical choice if you're trying to hide; and, finally, d) I didn't want to put them in a really luxurious room because Veronica was already going to be a little overwhelmed by the situaiton, and somewhere like the Grand might have spooked her too much. I understand we're all used to Logan using his money to surround himself in luxury, but he's not yet that Logan, so it made sense to me. ;D I'm glad you liked the room I sent them to, and thanks for the lovely words
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I'm the best evah, huh? I'll have to remember that next time you pick a fight with me... ;-)
You know I loved this, but most impressive in this AU is the beginning of the emergence of Veronica 2.0, jumping to conclusions that Logan's told Duncan about their tete a tete, and Logan trying diligently and patiently to dissaude her. His insistance that she not tell her father about the abuse is so typical of an abused family member, and it really resonated strongly with me here. And of course I LOVE that Logan stands up to his father for Veronica... *squee*
THis moment: Pursing her lips in a thin line, she scuffs her shoe in the sand. “No, I guess not. ... How would you explain....” Looking up into his stormy, confused eyes, she impulsively rises on tiptoe and gently kisses his cheek. “You shouldn’t be alone,” she murmurs, pressing her face to his.
He gathers her into his arms and lifts her onto the truck gate. ...is so sweet and tender, I just want to eat it up with a spoon. *Love* protective-Veronica
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"Best evah"???? *blinks* I have no clue what you mean, hon. Bwahaha!!!!
I'm so happy you picked up on the preview of Veronica 2.0 - I wrote this assuming the seeds of the Veronica who appears in Season 1 had to be there before her world went to hell, and part of the challenge for me was trying to keep this Veronica consistent with the girl she will become.
As you know, I had great reservations concerning writing about Logan's abuse at Aaron's hand - it's a sensitive subject for me personally, and it's been a frequent topic in fanficland, but I didn't feel I could ignore it. I'm so glad you felt it rang true.
Probably my favorite thing about Veronica is her willingness to jump into the fray to protect people she cares about. It's impulsive, and she doesn't always handle it well, but I love that about her.
Thanks for all your help with this, darlin'. Means so much to me. *mwah*
Your Aaron was really good. I love that you got both his violence in person and his ability to implied threats and intimidations when he can't use his fists (or belts.) I've known a few people like that and this was a really good capture.
So on your link to the next part you ask, "you know what's going to happen, right?"
My guess is a raucous game of scrabble. LOL. Am I right? Am I?
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Mmmmmmmm. Is is suddenly hotter in here? ;D For real, what does Veronica want with Donut anyway? I just love the description here, and what he does, the way he wins her over from all of her Donut pouting, guuuh.
“He’s my son, and he does what I tell him to. Do you understand me?”
I know when we were talking earlier you said that when you write you wait for the characters to speak to you, and dude, I can hear Aaron's voice in my head in the part where he grabs Veronica. It's so right, it's scary, with all the rrrrs when he says her name. Because Aaron really did that and man it was creepy, the way her rolled her name around and everything else he said.
Looking up into his stormy, confused eyes, she impulsively rises on tiptoe and gently kisses his ( ... )
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My reasoning for the Holiday Inn Express is that: a) they needed to leave Neptune, cuz I wouldn't put it past Aaron to go looking for the Xterra; b) they're only 15, and trying to stay incognito, under the radar - and who'd be looking for them at the Express; c) a big, middle class, impersonal hotel would be a more logical choice if you're trying to hide; and, finally, d) I didn't want to put them in a really luxurious room because Veronica was already going to be a little overwhelmed by the situaiton, and somewhere like the Grand might have spooked her too much. I understand we're all used to Logan using his money to surround himself in luxury, but he's not yet that Logan, so it made sense to me. ;D I'm glad you liked the room I sent them to, and thanks for the lovely words ( ... )
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You know I loved this, but most impressive in this AU is the beginning of the emergence of Veronica 2.0, jumping to conclusions that Logan's told Duncan about their tete a tete, and Logan trying diligently and patiently to dissaude her. His insistance that she not tell her father about the abuse is so typical of an abused family member, and it really resonated strongly with me here. And of course I LOVE that Logan stands up to his father for Veronica... *squee*
THis moment: Pursing her lips in a thin line, she scuffs her shoe in the sand. “No, I guess not. ... How would you explain....” Looking up into his stormy, confused eyes, she impulsively rises on tiptoe and gently kisses his cheek. “You shouldn’t be alone,” she murmurs, pressing her face to his.
He gathers her into his arms and lifts her onto the truck gate. ...is so sweet and tender, I just want to eat it up with a spoon. *Love* protective-Veronica ( ... )
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I'm so happy you picked up on the preview of Veronica 2.0 - I wrote this assuming the seeds of the Veronica who appears in Season 1 had to be there before her world went to hell, and part of the challenge for me was trying to keep this Veronica consistent with the girl she will become.
As you know, I had great reservations concerning writing about Logan's abuse at Aaron's hand - it's a sensitive subject for me personally, and it's been a frequent topic in fanficland, but I didn't feel I could ignore it. I'm so glad you felt it rang true.
Probably my favorite thing about Veronica is her willingness to jump into the fray to protect people she cares about. It's impulsive, and she doesn't always handle it well, but I love that about her.
Thanks for all your help with this, darlin'. Means so much to me. *mwah*
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I just love my Rindy.
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Your Aaron was really good. I love that you got both his violence in person and his ability to implied threats and intimidations when he can't use his fists (or belts.) I've known a few people like that and this was a really good capture.
So on your link to the next part you ask, "you know what's going to happen, right?"
My guess is a raucous game of scrabble. LOL. Am I right? Am I?
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