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[rk_sawyer]

Maybe she knew her game was up. Might be that. Or maybe it's just the tired look you get in your eyes when all you do for years is lie. Where at first the lie ignites some excitement, a decade of lies leaves your eyes stone dead. However bright your smile

Comments

[anson_in_london]

I very much enjoyed reading this. Your live journal continues to be as ambiguous as it is enchanting.

[georgiaclaire]

I like the first two paragraphs, but the last is awkward. I'd rephrase the last sentence, particularly.

[rk_sawyer]

You're right. I think it's primarily an issue of punctuation, as well. For example, "Don't worry you" at first looks like it should say "Don't worry your". I need a comma after "Don't worry", maybe.

I'll fix it up a bit to try and add some flow.

Thanks for the opinion!

[incubloss]

nice bro