Story Fragment--Ann Arbor Fiction & Poetry Contest, 2008

[robertmapril]

Tiny, sensible shoes peek out from an ankle-length denim dress. Her hair is in a braid that spills to the small of her back. Spills is not the right word. Flows. There are six people in the cue in front of the tellers at the Branch Office. Their mods range out to impatient and agitated. It' the lunch hour for everybody but the tellers. The people

Comments

just a few notes

[manekikoneko]

cue=queue? or is that the Americanization?
mods=moods?
It' missing an s.
Betsy=nice! I like the name Betsy.