Swan!AU - Chapter 2: The Trigger

Dec 01, 2011 17:25

Story: Swan Lake: Chapter 2 - The Trigger
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fic: swan au, ch: tim drake, ch: jason todd, p: jason/tim

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anidawehi December 1 2011, 17:21:00 UTC
Argh! Jason be nice to Tim, clearly his life isn't all roses either! And now that that's out of the way... *HUGS JASON*

Okay, now that I'm done talking to the characters, on to the author... I love this. Seriously, I have no idea why because ballet is right up there with tap in the extremely short list of dance forms I have no interest in learning, but it's just *compelling*! Jason's struggle to be good enough (I particularly love the fact that it's not just him being angsty thinking that, that he actually HAS been having problems despite his hard work, it feels much more real and hopeless) and his anger at the world...

I find it very interesting to catch these little glimpses of what Tim is really like, even through Jason's really harsh view of him. I can't wait to see what happens to make Jason actually SEE Tim and realize that he isn't an obnoxious prima donna, and he's just as lonely as Jason is.

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robinless December 1 2011, 18:23:01 UTC
I'm glad I got you interested in ballet (at least a tiny bit)! :D

Yup, he's not only being his angry self, he does have problems. But he's persistent, he'll figure out how to be better. And as for Tim... Jason is going to have quite a hard time getting to see through that mental image he already has of him, but he'll get there.

So glad you liked it!

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kyrdwyn December 1 2011, 18:11:41 UTC
Ow, poor Jason, trying so hard he's going to hurt himself. :(

And Tim, seems like there's more going on with him than just being the star of the show.

Nice chapter!

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robinless December 1 2011, 18:25:31 UTC
Jason does try too hard sometimes. But that's who he is, he just can't let things be. Tim has problems of his own, but it'll get some time for Jason to realize that.

I'm glad you liked it! C:

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doyou123 December 1 2011, 22:05:08 UTC
no, boys. oh the angst!

Jason, what are you doing? I can't wait to learn more about Timmy.

That being said there were some slight grammatical errors, words that didn't quite fit. But I think a read through will get them.

Please keep going. :)

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robinless December 1 2011, 22:12:46 UTC
Ugh, I'll give it another re-read then! *blush* Thanks for telling me!

I'm glad you liked it :)

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sashas87 December 2 2011, 03:41:39 UTC
Mmm. Dancers do horrible things to their bodies. I met one dancer who landed slightly wrong during a performance in the first act, and broke a toe. She totally kept dancing, taped it up during intermission, and acted like nothing was wrong. She said she didn't even notice breaking it until she went offstage, actually. Dancers really get into a weird headspace sometimes. It kinda sounds like Jason was in his space when he auditioned, but can't fall back into it now while he's practicing.

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robinless December 2 2011, 11:49:21 UTC
It's amazing what people can endure when they put their minds to it. And a bit terrifying, too. Sometimes it's hard to find the will and confidence to do what we have to, and that's partially Jason's problem now.

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mochalatt3 December 4 2011, 01:24:03 UTC
I'm glad to see you're continuing with this story :) I loved this chapter. Jason always makes my heart ache. He's such a sad and confused guy...I hope he gets some comfort soon <3

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robinless December 4 2011, 13:33:02 UTC
I'm glad you liked it! :D

Jason still has a bit of a long way to go, but hopefully next chapter he'll be a step closer to getting some happiness.

I've the story completely outlined but I'm a slow writer, mostly because I'm not a native English speaker. I should probably get a beta, so I'd be able to spend more time writing and less making sure what I write makes sense and actually means what I think it means... *rolls eyes*

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