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Drabble: Jayne/River-Oasis

Mar 10, 2009 16:26

Title: Oasis
Author: Romanceguru
Disclaimer: Joss is the boss of me.
Rating: R. Nothing but bad, naughty things.
Characters: Jayne/River
Prompt: Against for firefly100
Word Count: 400
A/N: Unbetaed. I’ve always wanted to try second person narrative, so tada! Seriously though, I’ve been losing my urge to write more and more lately, and it’s rather depressing. ( Read more... )

drabble, rayne, firefly100, jayne/river

Comments 31

karanina March 11 2009, 02:00:33 UTC

You've definately STILL got the magic baby!

Awesome way for Jayne to pass the time!

romanceguru March 19 2009, 04:53:31 UTC

*hides the rabbits*

Really? I thought it might be a fluke.

Jayne was comatose, he didn't have a choice!

how_obscure March 11 2009, 04:10:43 UTC

Ooh, I was so excited to see that you posted something, and you didn't disappoint! This is fantastic. You suck the reader right into Jayne's delerium and you've really got his voice down.

romanceguru March 19 2009, 04:56:05 UTC

Thank makes me happier than you know. Perfecting Jayne over River has always been difficult for me. I guess maybe 2nd-person-ing it into his head helped some. ; )

*feeds off your excitement*

idyllictorture March 11 2009, 06:39:00 UTC

I thought this was very good. I never would have guessed that you're going through a dry spell. The second person was very effective in this case. And the description of the deed left a little to the imagination which I liked.

romanceguru March 19 2009, 04:47:58 UTC

The miracle of the drabble! I think it's easier to focus when it's something concentrated, but an actual fic? That's where I'm struggling.

Thanks. I like to leave things up to the imagination. : )

crystalkei March 11 2009, 07:00:03 UTC

Loved it! And I second all others who wish you'd get more fic written. Of course, I understand. I haven't written anything in ages...RL can be such a hindrance, yes?

romanceguru March 19 2009, 04:44:41 UTC

When I write, I have to get in this weird, detached state, block out everything around me,. So yes, it's hard to keep up when you're trying to balance so many other things. I need super powers!

Too both of our muses. : )

bookaddict43 March 11 2009, 08:04:50 UTC

I love the River mirage and how you write Jayne's thoughts. The ending is awesome and I can hear Jayne hating the Captain's interruption to his dream.

I'm having trouble with the ficage too unfortunately. But it must be time for a redux at firefly100 that may jolt our muses!!

xfirefly9x March 11 2009, 13:57:43 UTC

Redux at firefly100! Yes!! :D

romanceguru March 19 2009, 04:41:35 UTC

As if Jayne needs a reason to hate the captain, right? ;-p

Thanks, I was trying to work out something different here, a fresh palette helped.

I'm glad I'm not alone… but not overly. There must be a cure! *runs to take a peek*