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[Hetalia] Deception

Dec 23, 2009 12:34

Title: Deception
Author: masanami
Character(s): Denmark/Sweden
Word Count: 920
Rating: PG-13
Timeline: Kalmar Union
Warnings: None.
Summary: Sweden and Denmark in the heat of battle.
Author's Note: Written for nordic5_xmas 's holiday exchange. Special thanks to blulious for her wonderful work as a beta reader.

( Denmark is always confident and something has made him more certain than ever that he is going to get his way on this day as well. )

type: one-shot, pairing: denmark/sweden

Comments 19

blulious December 27 2009, 18:52:44 UTC

Terrible beta reader is terrible. DX I didn't see this until you posted on the main community. *is not active in Kalmarunionen*

But yes, so happy to see some of my advice taken even tho it's not many...bahhh IMMA FAIL WRITER LOLZ). Did the piece get longer than the beta? I deleted the beta from my hardware so I'm not certain but It sure feels that way...

I think you have a thing for angsty pairs because it shows beautifully in your writing. GOSH, the atmosphere can't get any thicker with these two!! UST FTW, right? And semexseme is just a plus anywhere (though in this case Denmark rules--he's the [self-proclaimed] King of the Vikings after all. *hinthint for a fic idea? hinthint*

Anyway, congratulations for getting your Secret Santas in on time. I'm off to slave on mines! <3

masanami December 28 2009, 10:26:31 UTC

You know I always appreciate your help! You catch stuff I totally forget about--or suggest stuff that I had considered doing but wasn't sure whether it would work out or not...so I appreciate a second set of eyes on my writing :)

And nope, didn't get any longer. I just fixed around a few things that you pointed out.

Gosh, I know I do. I just work well with angst I guess. I should try writing comedy to learn to lighten the mood from time to time!

amygirl December 29 2009, 02:21:17 UTC

Yay...I am so liking all the fic of these two that has been popping up lately!

This was just awesome the push and pull between them how strong they both are and just...yeah...just about perfect really!

masanami December 30 2009, 00:14:25 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it :)

taivaspoika December 29 2009, 18:32:20 UTC

Ah, I've been readinf fics of these two a lot lately <3 ...not that I'm complaining, hehe...

Ah, the tension! And the way you described Sweden's half-blindness! Makes me wonder, do you have bad eyesight? Mine's really bad and wow, that's pretty much how I see the world without my glasses.

I just love the last sentence. Perfect <3
...lol, so much praise for you.

masanami December 30 2009, 00:15:34 UTC

Haha. Actually, yes, I have to wear contacts or glasses otherwise my vision is pretty blurry from far away. I guess I used my own experiences quite a bit for this one.

Thanks very much for the nice words :)

taivaspoika January 3 2010, 14:52:45 UTC

I guessed right! Heh~ It's nice to notice little things like that. Well, I hope your eyesight doesn't get any worse, since it's not very nice, not to be able tosee much farther than your nose.

But, no problem, I really liked it.

masanami January 5 2010, 00:47:34 UTC

Haha luckily it stopped getting worse years ago so it seems like I'm in the clear <3 But at least my experiences serve me well with my fics :)