[Gintama] Actions Speak Louder Than Words.

[rooftop_sakura]

Title: Actions Speak Louder Than Words.
Author: masanami
Character(s): Gintoki/Hijikata
Word Count: 1,336
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: None.
Summary: Gintoki thinks about the past as he watches Hijikata one rainy day.
Author's Note: Not really that happy with this one but figured I might as well post it since I spent time on it.

Comments

[xcriix]

I loved it, great job! <3

[masanami]

Thanks!! I'm glad you liked it <3

[masanami]

ahhh I'm so glad you thought it worked for them! I was kinda worried about that...

Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

[runawayroadkill]

@w@ So beautiful

[masanami]

Thank you <333

[neji_chan]

You don't like this? I thought it was sweet, and IC too. Though there was something about the beginning... as if the writing didn't flowed as smoothly. But that's just me, and I'm not writer so.

I always like reading about Hijikata from Gintoki's POV and I can see Hijikata showing a part of himself while Gintoki still doesn't (in a way, he's more secretive than Hijikata). But who knows? Maybe he is showing something without realising.

Loved the ending, and the fact that they don't need words (their relationship couldn't work otherwise).

[masanami]

eeeeh I don't like it as much as my last Gintama fic. GINTOKI IS SO HARD TO WRITE FOR! I felt like I wasn't hitting him right--but I'm glad that so far it seems like it was just in my head and it worked for the most part. And yes, I know the beginning is a little off, I got frustrated with trying to work it out in a way I liked and it ended up as is when I got tired of trying orz

I really enjoy both of their perspectives though I still think Gintoki is hard to hit the right way because can be both a shallow and deep character depending on the situation.

I love that aspect about their relationship <3

[neji_chan]

I have to admit I liked the other one better too :P But this one wasn't bad at all. And I understand, I've had that feeling when I draw sometimes.

Gintoki's such a mystery, even though he's the main character! And I'm not talking about his past, but in the way he acts, just like you said. The only way to get him right is to practice writing from his perspective more XD

[masanami]

I think its Gintoki. He's hard to wrap a finger around. Even though I liked the other one better, I thought the scene and idea were cute so I didn't want to scrap it either way <3

I agree. He's a difficult one, for sure.

[sakata_desu]

Very nice! Beautifully written, a nice portrayl of these two fairly different characters ^_^

Very good work!

[masanami]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)