still small voice [ao no exorcist]

[roppio]

Title: still small voice
Author: riouu
Length: 2037 words.
Fandom: Ao no Exorcist.
Pairing: Fujimoto Shirou/Mephisto Pheles.
Warnings: Sad things? A little bit of angst? None really aside from that.
Summary: Mephisto made sure to visit Shirou’s grave, despite the constant rain. He brought him flowers and cigarettes and something he owed but could never

Comments

you just made my night.

[einfurst]

i'm so glad i'm not the only person who ships this, and like .. i was looking through fanart and i found some really cute pictures. i just shipped them right away. and then i found your fanfic, which is the first mephisto x shirou fanfic i have found yet, and can i just say that THIS FIC MADE ME CRY. ohmygod. ; nn; " i loved it so much. i honestly .. ;; it was in character from my perspective. i agree with you. they definitely seemed to have an interesting dynamic, even though they've never actually talked to each other in the manga. we just know that they were close friends. aksdhaskjd. I JUST LOVED IT SO MUCH, YOU DO NOT UNDERSTAND. i shall read it again after i comment. ;D i will probably write one myself as well. ugh. loved it. x 23948723984. i can't even. thank you so much for writing this. ;;

;o;!

[riouu]

I have to say first that I too am incredibly glad I am not the only one who sees such potential in these two as a pairing! I feared I might be one of the only people who shipped these two. I am so, so, so very glad that others are fond of Shirou and Mephisto and I thank you for stumbling across this piece of fan fiction and for taking the time to actually read it! In fan fiction characterisation is incredibly important to me (writing someone out of character seems pointless somehow, as if you should just write about an entirely different character or your own design if you plan to bend the personality so out of shape) so to know that what I've written is thought of as well-characterised is very, very relieving! It makes me terribly happy to know that my writing was enjoyed (enough to be read again, even

Re: ;o;!

[einfurst]

fffffuuuu, i felt bad for replying because i felt like i would be spamming your fic, but yeah. ;; it's totally okay that you were rambling cause i do that too. besides, i think i would've given you a longer review if i weren't so tired at the time while reading. you know how many times i read this fic? LOL. i think i shared it with every ANE fan i know .. that i have on skype anyway. ;; ishipthissohard. i need more fanfics of these two, even if they're friendship fics. i don't even care at this point. this fic causes me to crave it, LOL. not that it's a bad thing. ;; < 3 i agree with what you said about characterization. it's important to me, too. ;D as a fellow fanfiction writer. ;3

don't apologize ~ < 3 i rarely cry reading fanfics so .. congratulations to youuu. ~ BEFRIEND ME, YOU WONDERFUL PERSON. ;; i am still so happy that i found this ficcie ~ is it just me, or is this the only english mephisto x shirou i have seen yet? :C this makes me so sad. i always have time to leave comments for well-written fics. < 33 ilu !

[riouu]

Psh, it's not spam at all, don't worry about it! c: A-And, fff, I'm super flattered that you thought this fic good enough to share it with other people like that! Thank you! I'm super, super happy, ah~! I do think it would be absolutely wonderful to see more of these two in any way - I don't mind whether or not I see something of them where they're friends or in some form of established relationship ;o; I'm...planning to write more. cough.

:> I shall consider it some sort of achievement then for sure, haha! And um, I haven't seen anything else with these two except a fic here~ but in general there isn't a huge amount of fic for this series yet (I think). sob

/scuttles off to write more

[umi_no_suzume]

I'm going to repeat what my lovely predecessor said but GODDAMNIT I CRIED!
That was just beautiful. I don't even remember how many times I read it.
The fanarts made me start to ship but for me this is the fic which really did it for me so now, because of you, this has become my Ao no Exorcist OTP and I'm really glad it did!
Thank you very much!

[riouu]

I will repeat what I told said aforementioned lovely predecessor and apologise for making you cry, then! ;o; Although as I mentioned above, it's sort of an achievement in a way for me that my writing caused someone to cry and feel something over it. I am, aaa, pretty ecstatic to hear that you enjoyed this enough to read it more than once (and that it caused you to ship these two, ah! They're a wonderful pair, they really are, and surely my favourite ♥)! Thank you so much for reading, and for taking the time to leave such a wonderful comment! ♥

[umi_no_suzume]

Aaaw, don't apologize, really, it's fine, I'm kinda used to it, if I cry over a fanfic it's that it's damn good, so, don't apologize for being good! (if that even makes any sense ^^)

Definitely my favourite.
It's a shame he's dead.

Aaw no problem! Comments are love! Who doesn't like comments? And there's no way I'll ever miss on stalking a wonderful author. Especially if I discover she writes on the DRRR Kink Meme too XD

[kyogres]

How did I miss the fic before? It was so good! Depressing, but good. I have this morbid fascination with stories that deal with character death, and how a close friend or lover responds to it. And the image of Mephisto calling Shirou out of habit only to have Rin answer instead is sad. ;__;

I do find it a bit odd that Shirou would kiss Mephisto like that... not without a bit more teasing or prodding from Mephisto, at least. But it served to further the story, so I can hand-wave it.

I don’t know in what way I loved you but I think I did
I loved this line, possibly because it sums up how I feel about love. There are many different kinds of love, but most of them tend to get ignored in favor of the sexual or romantic kind.

A raindrop ran down his cheek that felt different from usual.
I quite like this line too, actually.

On an unrelated note, as someone who is currently trying to deal with grief, it's interesting to see how other people (or characters) cope with it.

PS - I got confused while trying to read this phrase:
though he did

[riouu]

I just have to say, you leave the most wonderful comments ever

[kyogres]

Seriously? I'm kind of flattered. I generally don't comment on fic because I don't think I have anything interesting to say, or if I do have something to say, I don't know if the author wants critique.

You wouldn't have to make it much longer. I think a few extra lines of back-and-forth dialogue could have helped. Or a bit more hesitation on Shirou's part before the kiss. Like, he has this wicked idea about how he'll prove Mephisto wrong, but he's not sure how Mephisto would react to it. I agree that the flashback could draw you out of the scene at hand, but I think it's okay since the other flashbacks are so short. Not to mention that Mephisto seems to be lost in his own thoughts here, which is reflected in the length of this flashback. It helps that the return to the present immediately references the flashback, so it's easy to make the mental time jump.

Epic friendship/bromance fic between Mephisto and Father Fujimoto? I would be all over that! <3

[riouu]

I absolutely love constrictive critique ♥ so no worries there. c:

Ohh, that makes sense I suppose. I'm silly, haha;;; although I think I wrote this in...an hour or two at most and I don't have anyone who bets anything I write - but this sounds like an excuse as well aaa. I wonder what I should do~. There's the idea to mess with it a bit but then I don't know if I should or not, though I'll make sure to keep an eye on how I pace scenes in the future.

Yessss. ♥ Bromance and friend!love and everything at its finest, these two. The brilliance~. Hopefully I'll do it justice when I get around to it.

;w; I think it's okay to get emotional about something like that. Maybe I'm biased there though because I am, in general, a very emotional person.

My commas are kind of all over the place. I don't know how much of my punctuation and grammar is correct really, to be honest, since I've mostly self-taught myself to write >A>

But writing is good for you~! Your comments are making me look at the biggish fic more Fuji/Mephi I'm currently working

[copperiisulfate]

ahh their relationship (or at least the implications of it in canon and all the potential) intrigues me to no end. so glad you wrote this. very easy to picture it happening too and all the character voices were so spot on. hope you write more of them. and i really need to go and find all that fanart now ♥