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Fic: Sentire (8/9)

Apr 29, 2008 19:40

Title: Sentire (8/9)
Author: Ella Jane
Characters: Nine/Rose, Jack
Chapter Rating: PG-13
Series Rating: NC-17
Timeline: AU from The Doctor Dances
A/N: I have learned so many things over the last week or so, not the least of which is that I might not have the stomach to post a multi-part series again! I have LOVED reading all of your comments, but I am ( Read more... )

fic, nine/rose/jack, series: sentire

Comments 31

dark_aegis April 30 2008, 00:04:08 UTC

Ah-ha. So the explanations. Of a sort. Alien is as alien does and while he might be a git (okay a lot of a git) this does sort of make sense. I like the idea that staring into each others eyes was what made Time Lord sex work, though I suspect it's a bit more of that, including touch, mostly because I can't quite see the Doctor orgasming to staring into someone's eyes (and that sounds wrong). And that that was what had happened, though he should've prepared her a bit for it rather than simply trying it out. And it seems like there should be more to it than just that. Mostly because it seems almost a trivial thing to keep from her. But that might just be my impression there.

Btw, quick typo: He knew she was standing in front of her, but did not look up, not until he felt her hand under his chin, raising his eyes to hers. - think you meant "him" instead of "her" in that first part of the sentence.

And I absolutely loved this:

She stared at him, stared directly into his eyes, for a long, long time ( ... )

roquentine April 30 2008, 00:11:46 UTC

Ooh.. thank you for the him/her catch! I always have to go back and fix things, and frankly, I'm still AT WORK (which is ridiculous), so I'm a little bit frazzled. I re-read that part when I was tweaking the post and thought, "Something doesn't make sense here" but didn't actually figure it out. :)

mostly because I can't quite see the Doctor orgasming to staring into someone's eyes (and that sounds wrong)...

Bwah! Win. :) Thank you for commenting, as always!

honorh April 30 2008, 00:05:33 UTC

I'm honestly not even sure what to say to this. The emotion is so raw. Rose is hurting and angry, the Doctor's hurting and scared--but she is stronger than he knows. I think he needs a good, stern talking-to about actually discussing one's needs, sexual and otherwise, but the fact that he wants that kind of intimacy with her ought to soothe at least a little of Rose's pique.

roquentine April 30 2008, 00:15:23 UTC

Nine needs a talking-to about a lot of things, frankly. But he's just so darn damaged... sigh. It's probably why I like writing him. :)

nina_ds April 30 2008, 00:07:29 UTC

This is what I hoped was going on. Any other solution was going to make me very uncomfortable, I have to admit. I am just catching up, and I was a bit concerned about the direction of the last couple of chapters - not because of what happened so much as because of the way the Doctor was responding.

I want to emphasize that I've found this a well-written and very engaging story overall, but I have had trouble believing Nine would leave Rose in the state he did, unless touching/contacting her would just make it worse. I'm relieved to see it moving in that direction, and am looking forward to the ending now. (Well, not really the ending, but the next chapter, if you know what I mean!)

roquentine April 30 2008, 00:19:11 UTC

I'm glad things are working out okay for you! And I hope you will check out the reaction post... I'm actually making notes of what everyone is mentioning, because I want to hear more from you once the whoooole story is out there. So I really appreciate your comments!

nina_ds April 30 2008, 00:25:46 UTC

Good, I'm glad! I hesitated about saying anything, but I hope you know I only said it because I respect what you've been doing with the rest of the story,

And I loooove your icon. There are so many of that moment, but it's usually him that gets cropped out there, and this really gets both of their expressions so well.

roquentine April 30 2008, 01:16:28 UTC

Reactions and concrit are ALWAYS welcome! Anything that's phrased honestly, politely, and constructively serves to make me a better writer, and I'm always grateful for that. (So obviously, I somehow have all the best people reading my story!)

And since you mentioned it, I shall pimp icons-of-isis, who made almost all of the icons I have used in this series. I simply LOVE Nine in black and white, and these are fantastic.

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butterflyborn April 30 2008, 00:10:29 UTC

You can't end there! And that can't be the next to last chapter! *flails*

*hits refresh*

*sigh*

You AND the Doctor get lots of hugs right now. (especially since I wanted to hit him over the head with a sonic hammer yesterday.) *sheepish grin*

btw, I think I did uncover one typo:

He knew she was standing in front of her, but did not look up, not until he felt her hand under his chin, raising his eyes to hers.

I think the Doctor is still a bloke, yeah? Course, might make things interesting if not. LOL ;-)

Besides that... more please? *grin*

roquentine April 30 2008, 00:20:38 UTC

Hee! dark_aegis beat you to the typo catch, but I am ALWAYS grateful for those. And yes, as I think I commented to someone yesterday, Lifty the Beta's weapon of choice was a cricket bat. Don't worry... he would have deserved it. :) Thank you for commenting!

wendymr April 30 2008, 00:37:51 UTC

I think, like honorh, I'm not really sure what to say here. My reaction to the last chapter, as you know, was rather like nina_ds. So far I don't think I've seen enough to forgive the Doctor, no matter how contrite he's being, because he obviously hasn't told her the full story yet (there has to be more), because he left her when she was in pain and terrified, and because he never talked to her about this in the first place.

(I'm also pissed off on Jack's behalf that Jack's basically been told to keep out of the way and that this isn't any of his business, though I know Jack was more than willing to accept that it wasn't his explanation to have and you've also said that this is primarily a Nine/Rose story, so I can't really focus on that).

What do I like? Rose. Strong, determined, making clear that forgiveness and the regaining of trust isn't as simple as him saying he wants it - and having the courage at the end to look him in the eyeHowever, overall I'm still unsettled, but I know that's because you left off in the middle of explanations. I'm ( ... )

roquentine April 30 2008, 01:29:24 UTC

Yeah, there is a reason the characters are listed as "Nine/Rose, Jack" and not "Nine/Rose/Jack." More on that after tomorrow. Shall I send him to your place for some consolation in the meantime? :)

I'm still trusting you that the final chapter will satisfy me and give me enough to forgive the Doctor. *crumples under pressure* No! Wait! I'm up! ;) Thank you as always!