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roryevans

Sometimes Conversations

Jul 07, 2008 11:02

Title: Sometimes Conversations
Pairing: Peter/Caspian
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Summary: Caspian thinks about Peter's hands.

( Sometimes Conversations )

rating:pg, fic:narnia, pairing:peter/caspian

Comments 15

ash_1212 July 7 2008, 09:36:08 UTC

Beautiful. Fantastic story and writing :) (Also Yay that Peter didn't leave)

roryevans July 7 2008, 15:51:39 UTC

Thank you. Wasn't sure if this style was going to work out or not...but I'm glad it did.

It makes me happy too that Peter didn't leave too. It's summer. I can't stand to make him sad. Plus I'm beginning to fall in love with these LWL stories.

ash_1212 July 8 2008, 10:29:45 UTC

Me too. If the title has LWL in it I'm already like yay! :)

jademercy July 7 2008, 14:01:05 UTC

I simply love the attention given to the hands...I think that if you had deviated to other body parts it would have lost something. Well done!

roryevans July 7 2008, 15:54:03 UTC

I think so too. I can't even imagine what other body part I could pick. Hands are just...well, hands but there's so much to do with them and so many ways to describe them. I'm glad you liked it. <3

elmorawks July 7 2008, 14:36:20 UTC

i like the format, its new and refreshing! xD

loved the whole berry eating and lip staining part, and the part where Caspian found Peter at the balcony made me go 'awwwwwww'.

...and the last paragraph kicks ass.

roryevans July 7 2008, 16:00:05 UTC

Lol. This is all taken from life experience or rather things from the past few days. Well, everything up to and including the berries part. It's changed but same emotions and things like that.
I'm glad you liked the end. I realized after I wrote it that it went back to something in the middle of the story and was like oh! cool. Rewrote it and there it is.

_profiterole_ July 7 2008, 15:37:00 UTC

It's lovely. The style is so light, like a feather. :-)

roryevans July 7 2008, 16:02:44 UTC

Yay. Glad you like the style. It was a fun thing to try out. I might use it again sometime. Thanks for commenting. :)

christabel_rose July 7 2008, 20:37:02 UTC

Absolutely wonderful. Caspian totally worships the ground Peter walks on, and his observations are just so sweet and touching...

And it's just so Caspian to say that he's left-handed just to be able to sit next to Peter like that! *hugs Caspian*

Thank you for an awesome read! Can't wait to read more of your ficlets in the future *rubs palms together in gleeful anticipation*

roryevans July 10 2008, 04:38:36 UTC

Lol. Yes, yes Caspian would. I'm glad people like that. And thank you for reading it. I'm glad you enjoyed it. There will hopefully be more in the near future (once I actually get around to writing them). <3