Comments | rosepddle: Synopsis

rosepddle

Synopsis

May 21, 2009 17:46

As I was talking to some of the fabulous writers on Absolute Write forums, we got to talking about writing the dreaded synopsis. I've managed to widdle mine down to 1 page, single-spaced. So I told them I would share it. Now, I can't really gage the sucsess of this synopsis, but as I have had requests for 5 partials and from those, two fulls, maybe ( Read more... )

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spiritworld25 May 21 2009, 22:47:22 UTC

Wow, I loved this and I can't wait to read more. :) Great job.

rosepddle May 21 2009, 22:51:27 UTC

Thanks! I thought about posting excerts from the ms, but as it's being considered by agents, I don't know how they would feel about it should they offer to rep me. So when in doubt...

zellie_bean May 22 2009, 00:15:28 UTC

I think requests for partials definitely speak to the success of your synopsis!

Just a few notes for ya:

"murders of her family is " -> "murder" since family is technically singular

You don't need the commas around KALIE KNOWLES

I like that you mention fear forcing her--then we want to know what she's afraid of.

"special ops team known as Venators" - it's your word so you know how it works with grammar but to me "the Venators" would sound more natural

His sudden romantic feelings for Kalie has him all the more protective. -> "have him" since it relates to feelings. Though it sounds a little too conversational to me

That part about how cute Heath is still makes me giggle ;)

LOL Ryan and "none of that nonsense" That is SO him.

" Ryan and Kalie part ways with their friendship awkward and their burgeoning romance stalled." I like how you worded this sentence it works really well.

Love how it ties together at the end with problems that can lead to a sequel but also hope so you don't feel like you're left hanging.

rosepddle May 22 2009, 00:46:53 UTC

I had to smile when I saw your edit, while I appreciate it and I have made some of the changes you've suggested, it's pretty much too late to do anything about it. I have no more agents to send to, sadly.

That burgeoning sentence took me FOREVER to come up with! So I'm glad it finally works.

I never really refer to the guys as The Venators so it didn't sound right have it read that way.

I'm enjoying writing the second book in this series. I really love these characters...I think I'm in love with Ryan-LOL...but I'll have an affair with Heath! :-0