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[rotnroll59]

over the past couple months I've written various verses, but I havent ever really finished any of them. I was hoping someone could give me some feedback, ideas, etc etc etc..so help me out! remember, its still just a work in progess and they may not all nessecarily be part of the same song..but here we go

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[sad_little_moon]

played my heart like it was made of string
you pressed the chords like it was nothing
your fingers on the fret
thought i'd never regret
but now the tune's not so sweet
and my heart is off beat

[hatecityhero]

you wrote the last one for me, and i like it alot

[rotnroll59]

thanks

So I fooled around with that first poem and wrote a song.

[redbubblebath]

It's got more of an edgy rock n' roll feel to it. That's how I see it anyway